I am writing a paper on why the Deaf community does not want to have cochlear implants. I've been told I need a hook in the first paragraph. This is what I wrote, does this sound good? The first sentence is what I added.

In 1961 when the first cochlear implant was developed, the hearing world celebrated that a “fix” was found for deafness. The hearing world views being Deaf as a disability and something that needs to be fixed. The Deaf World did not celebrate the invention of the cochlear implant. Placement of the cochlear implant in the Deaf or hard of hearing child has been very controversial for the Deaf community. The Deaf community views their world as a minority culture having their own identity, values, and morals. The Deaf World embraces their Deafness and does not feel that they need to be fixed so, they feel that they do not need a cochlear implant

Good, but I might use two sentences:

In 1961 when the first cochlear implant was developed, the hearing world celebrated that a “fix” was found for deafness. Oddly the deaf world did not join the celebration.