I need help with writing my thesis on music genres.
I turned in my pre-writing to my instructor with this thesis:
Thesis: Music carries power with its many different genres, and its power to make people feel different ways is very strong. The different types of genres, for example, include rock and roll, hip hop, and pop. These three genres of music make people feel an array of different emotions, for example, the rock n’ roll genre can make someone feel happy all the way to anger.
However, they said that I did not provide a personal stance that can be argued or proved.
Can someone please provide their opinion or advise how I can make this thesis better? To provide a personal stance on music genres?
Thank you for your time :)
Read the entire webpage (below) carefully, including the sample essay. And remember that in a true thesis statement, you must take a stand, include your opinion — it needs to be arguable.
http://guidetogrammar.org/grammar/composition/classification.htm
To provide a personal stance on music genres in your thesis, you can consider the following approach:
Start by reflecting on your own experiences and preferences as a listener. Ask yourself questions like:
1. Which music genres resonate with you the most?
2. How have these genres influenced your emotions and attitudes?
3. Are there specific moments or songs within these genres that have had a profound impact on you?
Once you have identified your personal stance on music genres, you can incorporate it into your thesis statement to make it more argumentative and provable. Here's an example:
Revised Thesis: Through the exploration of various music genres that personally resonate with me, such as rock and roll, hip hop, and pop, I aim to demonstrate the profound emotional impact that these genres have on individuals, illustrating the power of music to evoke a range of feelings from happiness to anger.
By adding the phrase "that personally resonate with me" and expressing your intention to demonstrate the emotional impact, you have introduced your personal stance into the thesis statement. This allows you to argue and prove your point based on your own experiences and observations.
Remember, as you develop your thesis, be prepared to support your arguments with persuasive evidence derived from scholarly sources, case studies, personal anecdotes, or any other relevant material that strengthens your position. Good luck with your thesis!