Could you please read my biography of Walt Whitman and if there any revising that needs to done please let me know. Thank you!
Biography of Walt Whitman
Walter Whitman was born on May 31, 1819 in Westhills, Town of Huntington, Long Island. Walter's parents were interested in the Quaker religion. Walter Whitman was the second out of nine children, and had been nicknamed "Walt" to distinguish from his father. By age four, Whitman moved with his family from Westhills to Brooklyn, living in a series of homes in part due to bad investments. At the age of eleven, Whitman concluded formal schooling, and sought employment due to his family's financial situation. Whitman became an office boy for two lawyers and later as an apprentice and printer's devil for the weekly Long Island newspaper the Patriot. Working as an apprentice and a printing devil he learned about the printing press, and type setting. The following summer Whitman worked for another printer Erastus Worthington, in Brooklyn. His family moved back to Westhills in the Spring, but Whitman remained and took a job at the shop of Alden Spooner editor of the leading Whig weekly newspaper the Long Island Star. While at The Star, Whitman because a regular patron of the local library, joined a town debating society, began attending theater proformances, and anonymously published some of his earliest poetry in The New York Mirror. Whitman didn't have a wife, but he had a romantic friendshop with Ellen Grey. Whitman died on March 26, 1892 from bronchial pneumonia, he was 72 years old.
This is plagiarized almost verbatim from the following:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Walt_Whitman#Early_life
You need to write your own paper. Plagiarizing will get you zeroes on your papers.
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