Hey guys. I'm writing a play and I'd just like to hear y'all's opinions and suggestions. Basically the premise is that this 5th grade boy, Benjamin, has an imaginary friend. He was home schooled for a year so he could have therapy and see a specialist about it because his parents believe that his imagination has gotten out of hand (haven't done all the research on this part yet, so it will be more specific and accurate eventually). The play begins with all the kids at school gossiping about him and hearing that he's coming back to school. His friend, Allen, is excited and nervous because he's missed him but thinks he should get rid of his imaginary friend. Ben returns and is bullied and abused by the other kids. Allen ends up having to stop being friends with him because he can't stand the ridicule anymore. At the beginning of second act, we meet Sebastian (imaginary friend) for the first time. Ben has a discussion with him and ends up angry at him (there's also evidence that this friend is not human and may be a dragon). This is where I come to my first question: Should I have Ben talk to thin air, or should I have there be an actor representing Sebastian? Anyhow, Ben goes to school the next day and continues to be bullied. There's a rumor about why a classroom is missing in the school. Allen is now friends with the wrong kinds of kids and trying to overcome his guilt about leaving Ben. We have another scene with Sebastian and Ben in the bedroom and Sebastian attacks Ben. Ben goes to the hospital, having passed out, and his parents can't figure out what happened. Now, my biggest problem is trying to figure out how to conclude it. Option 1: it turns out that Sebastian was truly imaginary the whole time and Benjamin is insane. Option 2: Sebastian is a dragon that comes from the missing classroom and befriended Benjamin. In the end, Sebastian is killed. Thanks for your help, tell me what you think! :)
The story is your own, so if you like it, then that's what it can be. You will have to cut out some of the non-important parts to save time (only if it goes over the time limit) though.
Thanks Cardinary. I truly am curious what your opinions are, tho.
If you truly want my opinion, I think: the story isn't all that bad, but if this story seems really depressing. It doesn't look like there's many happy moments in this story. Though, that's just my opinion.
That makes sense. I was going for a bit more of a sad story, but I'll try to add more humor and happy moments. I guess I never thought about that. I don't want my readers/viewers to be too depressed...
I understand you going with a sad story, but personally, I feel like the story needs some comedy relief here and there. :3
Thanks for your suggestion!
It sounds like you have an interesting premise for your play! I can definitely help you brainstorm and offer some suggestions for your questions.
1. Should Ben talk to thin air or have an actor representing Sebastian?
This is a creative decision that ultimately depends on what you want to convey to the audience. If you want to emphasize the imaginary nature of Sebastian, you could have Ben talk to thin air, as it would highlight the contrast between Ben's reality and his imagination. On the other hand, having an actor represent Sebastian could provide a physical presence and interaction, making the relationship more tangible for the audience. Consider how you want the audience to perceive the dynamic between Ben and Sebastian, and make a decision based on that.
2. How to conclude the play?
Both option 1 and option 2 have potential, and it depends on the themes and message you want to convey. Here are some thoughts on each:
Option 1: If you choose this ending, it could explore the theme of mental health and the blurred lines between imagination and reality. It could create a thought-provoking discussion about the importance of supporting and understanding individuals who may have different experiences or perceptions of the world. However, be mindful of portraying mental health respectfully and avoiding stigmatization.
Option 2: If you choose this ending, it adds an element of fantasy and adventure to the play. It allows for exploration of friendship, sacrifice, and the power of imagination. However, make sure to establish the dragon aspect earlier in the play and weave it into the narrative to avoid it feeling like a sudden plot twist.
Consider which option aligns better with the overall tone and themes you want to convey in your play. You can also experiment with different endings or combine elements from both options to create a unique conclusion that resonates with your audience.
Remember, these are just suggestions, and you can adapt them according to your creative vision for the play. Happy writing!