Is this answer good enough?
Mr. Peters learns to be satisfied with his life and decides not to use his third and final wish. Did Mr. Peters make the right decision to help him resolve his internal conflict? Compose an argument that is at least one paragraph in length. Support your claims with at least two valid and relevant pieces of evidence from the text, including direct quotes and page numbers.
My answer;
Mr. Peters did make the right decision to solve his internal conflict. His internal conflict was whether or not to turn Lieta back into a sawn, so she can be happy with her sister. The first wish he made, he wished for a beautiful wife. That wish brought him Lieta, his beautiful wife that use to be a swan. Before she was turned into a wife, she was happy with her sister. While she is human, one thing she did was visit her sister at the river. While Lieta was separated from her sister, she began to grow sickly thin and pale. Mr. Peters made his second wish to turn Lieta back into a swan Direct pieces of evidence to support this are, "For a time he thought that all would be well, but then he saw thin and pale she was growing." pg.75 "Then he knew that it was hopeless and she would never be happy as a human. He stooped down and kissed her goodbye, then took another leaf from his notecase, blow it out of the window, and used up his second wish" pg.75
What should I change about this to make it better?
Your answer is a good start, but here are some suggestions to make it better:
1. Begin with a strong introductory sentence that clearly states your position: "I believe that Mr. Peters made the right decision to resolve his internal conflict by not using his third and final wish."
2. Provide a clear and concise explanation of the internal conflict Mr. Peters faced: "Mr. Peters' internal conflict revolved around whether or not to turn his wife, Lieta, back into a swan so that she could be reunited with her sister and regain her happiness."
3. Use transition words to smoothly connect your ideas: "Furthermore," "Moreover," "In addition," etc.
4. Incorporate direct quotes from the text to provide evidence for your claims. Ensure that the quotes are relevant and support your argument. In your response, mention the quotes and their page numbers but do not include the quotes themselves.
5. Expand your explanation of the evidence. For example, you can elaborate on how Lieta's health deteriorated and how Mr. Peters' decision to turn her back into a swan was based on his realization that she would never be truly happy as a human.
6. Conclude with a strong closing statement that reinforces your argument: "By deciding not to use his third wish and allowing Lieta to remain a human, Mr. Peters ultimately resolved his internal conflict and chose her happiness over his own desires."
By making these adjustments, your response will be more cohesive, persuasive, and supported by relevant evidence from the text.