I need some help with my narrative essay about how I met a friend. I don't think I quite understand what I need to do, I've already written it but I need help fixing it to make it better. I have included information about when we met (June 28, 2016), how we met (a friend and I were building a sandcastle and she came over to help us), where we met (a day at the beach with some friends and their mutual friends), how we got to know each other (our moms became friends and wanted to get to know each other more and us visit their house), and a fact that is unimportant but I included anyway (she is younger than me but taller than me). but it still isn't good enough, I have no idea what to add to the writing or how to fix it. Can someone please help me.
If you started from the beginning and told the story to the end, that's a real bore -- boring to write and boring to read!
Try starting out with a couple of paragraphs telling about the BEST time you ever had with this friend. What were you doing? Where did you go? How did you feel? etc.
Then write the rest.
Before you submit it, be sure you have someone read it aloud to you. Yes, OUT LOUD! After you fix it up, have it read aloud to you again. Fix it again! It may take more than twice through like this before you submit it, but you'll end up with a better paper!
Thank you Writeacher, you are always a huge help with my work.
You're very welcome.
Of course, I'd be happy to help you with your narrative essay! Writing about how you met a friend can be a great way to showcase your storytelling skills. To improve your essay, I suggest considering the following elements:
1. Introduction: Begin by capturing the reader's attention and setting the scene. Provide some background information on the beach setting and a brief overview of the narrative you are about to tell.
2. Descriptive details: Paint a vivid picture for the reader by incorporating sensory details that immerse them in the story. Describe the sounds of the waves crashing, the feeling of warm sand between your toes, and the sights and smells of the beach environment.
3. Conflict or tension: Introduce a conflict or tension that adds interest to your story. It could be a challenge you faced while building the sandcastle or a misunderstanding that occurred when your friend first approached you and your friend.
4. Dialogue: Incorporate dialogue between you and your friend to make the story more engaging and authentic. This allows the reader to get a sense of your personalities and how your friendship started to develop.
5. Character development: Besides describing how you met, expand on how your friendship grew over time. Share specific moments, experiences, or conversations that solidified your bond. Discuss common interests, shared values, or any unique aspects of your friendship.
6. Reflective conclusion: Conclude your essay by reflecting on the impact this friendship has had on your life. Consider how this friend has influenced you, taught you valuable lessons, or helped you grow as a person.
Once you've considered these elements, you can review your essay and make revisions accordingly. Read it aloud to identify any areas that may need improvement, such as clarity, sentence structure, or grammar errors. Remember to be concise, engaging, and authentic in your writing.
Lastly, do not be afraid to seek feedback from others. Share your essay with someone you trust, such as a teacher, friend, or family member, who can provide constructive criticism and suggest further improvements.
Good luck with your narrative essay, and I hope these suggestions help you enhance your story about how you met your friend!