I need help with concision on these sentences.

. So long as states are not bound by a national curriculum and standards, students will not receive the same quality of education across the United States.

4. Critical-care nursing is stressful due to the fact that the patients have life-threatening illnesses. Critical-care nurses must have steady nerves to care for patients who are critically ill and very sick. The nurses must also not lack possession of medical and interpersonal skills. It is considered by most health-care professionals that these nurses are an essential factor in the improvement of these patients’ health. They are deserving of the profession’s support.

5. Their software programs generally demonstrated and also showed that many companies and businesses could basically benefit and profit due to the fact that they eliminated unnecessary overhead and expenses.

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  1. http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/concise.htm
    http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/plague.htm (Ex: #7 here)

    Which words and phrases can be cut out and/or rephrased to avoid repetition and wordiness?

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