Could you check my sentences. Thank you very much
1. If you ask her, she'll tell you the story
2. When she talked to the old woman, she would only smile and nod.
3. If she listens carefully, she could hear someone moving around upstairs in the house.
4. If she spoke, the room grew silent and felt cold.
5. When he thinks back, he can still remember the pale figure standing in the doorway.
1. needs a period at the end. Otherwise, it's OK.
2. To whom does "she" refer in the main clause? The first "she" or the old woman?
3. Re-think the tense of the main verb.
4. OK
5. OK
4 should be when instead of if
#4 could use either "If" or "When" Either one will work, but the meaning changes a bit with each one.
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could be
If she listened carefully, she could hear someone moving around upstairs in the house
Yes, right.
Sure! I'd be happy to check your sentences. Here's the breakdown for each one:
1. "If you ask her, she'll tell you the story."
- This sentence is grammatically correct. It is a conditional sentence, expressing that if someone asks her, she will share the story.
2. "When she talked to the old woman, she would only smile and nod."
- This sentence is also grammatically correct. It describes a past action, where she would only smile and nod when talking to the old woman.
3. "If she listens carefully, she could hear someone moving around upstairs in the house."
- This sentence is grammatically incorrect. To make it correct, you should make the verb tense consistent. It can be changed to: "If she listens carefully, she can hear someone moving around upstairs in the house." The phrase "she can hear" indicates the present ability to hear, rather than the conditional ability expressed by "could."
4. "If she spoke, the room grew silent and felt cold."
- This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses the conditional form "if she spoke" to describe a cause-and-effect relationship: when she spoke, the room became silent and felt cold.
5. "When he thinks back, he can still remember the pale figure standing in the doorway."
- This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses the present tense "he can still remember" to describe the ability to recall a past event when thinking back. The sentence describes that he can remember a pale figure standing in the doorway when reflecting on the past.
Overall, your sentences are well-constructed with just a minor correction needed in sentence #3. Great job!