okay, I need to do a powerpoint for this career "computer animation"
I need help writing a simple, short, punchy paragraph or list. Yet able to get the message across to the audience.
Heres original:
The career outlook for computer animators is good and expected to grow by about 16 percent between 2006 and 2016. Demand for animators is growing because more video games, movies, special effects and web pages are using computer animation. However, even with the expected growth, competition will be keen as more people are looking for job openings than there are positions available.
Edit #1:
The field of computer animation has seen enormous growth over the past decade due in part to the advancement of animation technology and in part to the expanding career options available to those who work in the field. The job outlook for computer animation occupations is optimistic as job growth is expected to continue to rise well into the next decade and beyond.
Edit#2:
The job outlook for computer animation professionals is very good and is expected to stay that way for the foreseeable future. Computer animation professionals are expected to enjoy competitive salaries, job security, and diverse job sectors to choose from.
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Please help, which of the two edits would be better (I still think they are too long). If not please suggest an alternative or tips.
Thank you.
The second edit is better than the original or the first edit. I'd substitute "excellent" for "very good," though. You can also delete "for the foreseeable future."
thank you for responding.
Both Edit #1 and Edit #2 provide relevant information about the job outlook for computer animation professionals. However, if you are looking for a shorter and punchier paragraph, you may consider combining the key points from both edits into a concise statement. Here's a suggested alternative:
"Computer animation offers a promising career path with strong job growth and diverse opportunities. The rapid advancement of animation technology has fueled this growth, providing professionals with competitive salaries, job security, and an expanding range of sectors to work in."
Tips to further condense your message:
1. Identify the key points you want to convey, such as job growth, technology advancement, and competitive advantages.
2. Use concise and precise language to communicate these key points.
3. Avoid unnecessary repetition or extraneous details.
4. Prioritize clarity and impact over length.
Remember, it's important to strike a balance between being concise and providing enough information to effectively convey your message.