Rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise:
The end result of completely eliminating the floodwall was utter devastation.
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The phrase "end result" is redundant. That is, you don't need both words. Omit "end" and it'll mean the same thing.
Same with "completely eliminating" and "utter devastation." Which words can you eliminate and keep the meaning the same?
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Save this webpage somewhere:
http://writerswrite.co.za/200-most-common-redundancies
It's a terrific list of most or maybe all the redundancies we read and hear every day -- on TV, in the news, etc.
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The floodwall was utterly devastation.
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I'd write this: Eliminating the floodwall caused devastation.
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To make the sentence more concise, you can say:
"Completely eliminating the floodwall resulted in utter devastation."
In this revision, we have removed the redundancy by placing the verb "resulted" immediately after the cause, "eliminating the floodwall." By doing so, we avoid repeating the word "result" and make the sentence more compact and straightforward.