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Right before the war Imperialistic, territorial, Nationalism and economic rivalries had been intensifying among Germany, France, Great Britain, Russia, and Austria-Hungary. The Balkan war was from 1912 to 1913; all the major powers increased in size as well as in war material. The British Empire had over five continents and France had control over the largest parts in Africa. With industrialism rising quickly countries wanted and needed new markets. Germany’s rivalry with France and Britain increased because they only had small areas of Africa while France and Britain owned large areas of Africa. Just with one trigger it would blow up into a war; and that is exactly what happened.

Right before the war<~~which war? also, add comma Imperialistic, territorial, Nationalism<~~needs to be an adjective for parallel construction in this series; also, add comma and economic rivalries had been intensifying among Germany, France, Great Britain, Russia, and Austria-Hungary. During the Balkan war from 1912 to 1913, all the major powers increased in size as well as in war material. The British Empire had over five continents<~~what? the British Empire controlled all the land on five continents?? also, add comma and France had control over the largest parts in Africa. With industrialism rising quickly<~~add comma countries wanted and needed new markets. Germany’s rivalry with France and Britain increased because they<~~"they" = who? only had small areas of Africa<~~add comma while France and Britain owned large areas of Africa. Just with one trigger it<~~what is "it"? would blow up into a war; and that is exactly what happened.

I'm not sure "owned" is the right word to use in the next-to-last sentence.

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