As a teenager, I was not obsessed about eating out. My family would eat at a restaurant at least twice a week. Every time we went anywhere, it was a challenge for my parents to find a suitable food and a nice quality restaurant. Fortunately, exception I loved the place and this made my parents love it too. The restaurant seemed dreamlike and interesting to me when I was a primary school kid, and, surprisingly, the place still fascinates me today. Walking into the restaurant gives me the best feeling. No matter how many times I visit, I always love to examine what is around me. Each and every kind smile the employees have on their faces and soft foreign music playing always makes me feel relaxed. When I breathe in the aroma of the Italian food, it always reminds me how hungry I am. The uniquely textured walls produces a smooth yet flowing look, it’s almost as I am in a famous building in Rome. The marble tiled floor beneath me gives the restaurant a clean yet warm appearance the server’s kind and gentle eyes look at their customers and politely ask for what they prefer to eat. I always notice the quite atmosphere around me. This makes everyone's mood ever so noticeable this restaurant always seems to have the most friendly customers.
does this need paragraphing
does it need paragraphs
Yes. And the sentence beginning "Fortunately" makes no sense.
yes i know
Hint: there is a paragraph break after that sentence, once you rewrite it so that it makes sense. There may be others. Your second draft will be better. :)
Yes, this passage would benefit from paragraphing. Currently, it is written as one large block of text, making it difficult to read and follow the flow of ideas. By breaking it up into paragraphs, each containing a clear topic or idea, it will be easier for readers to navigate and understand the content. Here's a suggested way to reorganize the passage into paragraphs:
As a teenager, I was not obsessed with eating out. My family would eat at a restaurant at least twice a week. Every time we went anywhere, it was a challenge for my parents to find a suitable food and a nice quality restaurant. Fortunately, there was one exception that I loved, and this made my parents love it too. The restaurant seemed dreamlike and interesting to me when I was a primary school kid, and, surprisingly, the place still fascinates me today.
Walking into the restaurant gives me the best feeling. No matter how many times I visit, I always love to examine what is around me. Each and every kind smile the employees have on their faces and the soft foreign music playing always make me feel relaxed. When I breathe in the aroma of the Italian food, it always reminds me how hungry I am. The uniquely textured walls produce a smooth yet flowing look, almost as if I am in a famous building in Rome. The marble-tiled floor beneath me gives the restaurant a clean yet warm appearance.
The server's kind and gentle eyes look at their customers and politely ask for what they prefer to eat. I always notice the quiet atmosphere around me. This makes everyone's mood ever so noticeable. This restaurant always seems to have the friendliest customers.
By paragraphing the passage, it becomes easier to read and comprehend the writer's thoughts and experiences at the restaurant.