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A man with the last name of Yang and his assistant tried to sell the fur of a panda cub, but the Chinese police captured them. The reporter found out that Yang and his accomplice bought their twenty-four inches long fur seven years ago from a man who lived in Southwestern China.

I can imagine how much pain the baby panda had experienced when the man who sold Yang the fur, shed the cub. The deprived panda cub must have been cold, since there was no coat of fur to keep it warm. Anyone who performs this reprehensible act should deserve punishment. Cutting the fur off a panda cub is extremely cruel, considering that the giant panda is recognized as one of the world’s most endangered species. There are approximately 1,500 pandas in an isolated nature reserves in Sichuan, Gansu, and Shaanxi provinces.

The adored giant pandas can be found in the mountain areas of Southwest China eating mostly bamboos. Some of the problems that the pandas may have faced were natural, but others were because of man. One of the problems was that pandas do not produce many offspring during their lifetime. In addition, the cubs are very small and are vulnerable to leopards. Because pandas eat bamboo, this can lead to another problem. Bamboos grow in large patches and different kinds of bamboo blossom in different years. After the pandas have been eaten the bamboos, nothing is left behind. Therefore, the pandas must go from one good patch to another to get their nutrient. The pandas are unable to go further, because humans have destructed their environment by building cities and roads. Humans’ obstruction endangers the pandas, because the pandas’ space is limited.

To keep the pandas from becoming extinct, the Chinese government created preserves where bamboo grows well and giant pandas are established. Furthermore, the delicate panda territory will be protected from any construction made by people and from damages caused by other animals when they graze on any rising seedlings and walk over the emaciated mountain soil. Moreover, the government is trying to introduce pandas to new regions in order to expand their environment. To this, bamboo corridors, which are strips of land, have been created to help pandas move to the new area and to make more habitats and free space available for the pandas. Thus, this method enables more pandas to move at greater distances to look for mates and extend further in the population.

The improvement and expansion that has been made since, is difficult to be perceived or grasped through just one perspective. The picture only captures the panda’s action; it does not extend beyond that. The picture is like a scene, a section of the whole representation. There is a panda, and it is holding onto a bamboo. The knowledge is limited to what is focused. The history of pandas that the image is fallen back allowed viewers to imagine the story behind the picture. Nevertheless, pictures present images as fragments of a whole. The images are incomplete. The experiences and the knowledge of a particular subject allow viewers to collect their thoughts about a picture based on their acquaintance and familiarity of the subject they are examining.


A man with the last name of Yang and his assistant tried to sell the fur of a panda cub, but the Chinese police captured them. reword...Chinese police recently captured a man... The reporter what reporter? found out that Yang and his accomplice bought their twenty-four inches long why is the length needed? Trite..it was a baby panda fur seven years ago from a man who lived in Southwestern China.

I can imagine how much pain the baby panda had experienced when the man who sold Yang the fur, shed the cub. Are you not thinking? Goodness, removing "fur" means removing all the skin, thus killing the animal.... The deprived panda cub must have been cold, since there was no coat of fur to keep it warm. Anyone who performs this reprehensible act should deserve punishment. yes, it is illegal, however, so what? I am becoming confused as to the point (thesis) of this essay Cutting the fur off a panda cub is extremely cruel, why so? is cruel if it is a panda, but ok if it is done to a skunk? considering that<reword> the giant panda is recognized as one of the world’s most endangered species. There are approximately 1,500 pandas in an isolated nature reserves in Sichuan, Gansu, and Shaanxi provinces. this entire paragraph is in need of examination. What is the point?

The adored giant pandas can be found in the mountain areas of Southwest China eating mostly bamboos. Some of the problems that the pandas may have faced were natural, but others were because of man. One of the problems was that pandas do not produce many offspring during their lifetime. In addition, the cubs are very small and are vulnerable to leopards. Because pandas eat bamboo, this can lead to another problem. Bamboos grow in large patches and different kinds of bamboo blossom in different years. After the pandas have been eaten the bamboos, nothing is left behind. THe last two sentences are trite. Rethink, then reword Therefore, the pandas must go from one good patch to another to get their nutrient. trite The pandas are unable to go further, because humans have destructed reword their environment by building cities and roads. Humans’ obstruction endangers the pandas, because the pandas’ space is limited. reword this last sentence, or delete...

To keep the pandas from becoming extinct, the Chinese government created preserves where bamboo grows well and giant pandas are established. Furthermore, the delicate panda territory will be protected from any construction ,made by people trite..who else can do construction? , and from damages caused by other animals when they graze on any rising seedlings and walk over the emaciated mountain soil. Moreover additionally?, the government is trying to introduce pandas to new regions in order to expand their environment. To this, bamboo corridors, which are strips of land, have been created to help pandas move to the new area and to make more habitats and free space available for the pandas. rephase, this is awkward Thus, this method reword enables more pandas to move at greater distances to look for mates and extend further in the population.

The improvement and expansion that has been made since since when? I would delete the phrase, is difficult to be perceived or grasped through just one perspective. The picture what picture only captures the panda’s action; it does not extend beyond that. The picture is like a scene, a section of the whole representation. There is a panda, and it is holding onto a bamboo. The knowledge is limited to what is focused. The history of pandas that the image is fallen back allowed viewers to imagine the story behind the picture. Nevertheless, pictures present images as fragments of a whole. The images are incomplete. The experiences and the knowledge of a particular subject allow viewers to collect their thoughts about a picture based on their acquaintance and familiarity of the subject they are examining. the entire last paragraph is nonsense. I have no idea what you are trying to communicate. Most of the sentences are fragments of some thought, I guess. This last paragraph is in need of a total rethinking, and rewrite.

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