Read the following report of an accident that occurred near a busy intersection. Then write four or five sentences describe the incident from each of the indicated viewpoints.

The sixteen-year-old driver of a brand-new Toyota collided with a cement truck that was just pulling out of a McDonald's parking lot. It was 5:30 P.M. on a sultry August Fridag. Nearby, a young couple pushing strollers ambled down the street, and a boy struggled with two German shepherds straining at their leashes. From an apartment window high above the traffic jam, an elderly woman watched.

1. Omniscient

Dylan, the sixteen-year-old driver of the Toyota that he begged his father to buy for his recent birthday, shook his head in disbelief as to what had happened. The middle-aged driver of the cement truck, Jeremy, cursed quietly under his breath and pulled out his cell phone to contact his employer about the accident, glaring at Dylan the entire time. Nearby, a young couple with strollers stood frozen in their tracks and stared at the damaged trucks from a distance. From an apartment window high above the site of the accident, an elderly woman wondered just what was wrong with teenagers these days.

2. One of the drivers

"Oh, God, groans Dylan. He couldn't stop himself from shaking his head or his hands for that matter. How could this have happened? How could he not have noticed the large cement truck pulling out of the McDonald's parking lot? He had no excuse for the massive dent on the left side of his brand-new Toyota or for his father.

3. One of the witnesses

"Do you think we should call the police?" Beth asked her husband, Jason. Her fingers still clenched tightly to the handles of the stroller where one of her children slept, thankful they had decided not to grab a bite to eat at McDonalds. She was also glad the collision hadn't woken the twins. God only knows how long it would take her to put them back to sleep.

4. Another character you insert in the scene

"How could you not see the giant concrete truck pulling out, you idiot?" Max mumbled to herself as she watched the aftermath of the truck collision from her window seat at McDonalds. She took tiny sips of the cheap but effective coffee only McDonalds offered, hoping to make it last. Once the coffee ran out, she would have to leave to finish her morning errands and pass the damaged trucks on her way back to her car. The sight, Max was certain, would remind her of the accident that robbed her of her mother what seemed like yesterday.

You also left out he boy with the dogs.

See my additional comment below, in your first post. Maybe Ms. Sue has some additional advice.

1. Omniscient: The perspective from an outside observer provides a comprehensive view of the incident, focusing on the thoughts and reactions of various individuals involved. The driver, Dylan, is in disbelief over the accident, while the cement truck driver, Jeremy, is angry and contacts his employer. The young couple with strollers stands frozen, and the elderly woman watching from the apartment window wonders about the state of teenagers today.

2. One of the drivers: Dylan, the teenage driver, is overwhelmed with remorse and disbelief at the collision. He questions how he could have missed the cement truck and expresses concern for the damage to his new Toyota and the consequences he will face with his father.

3. One of the witnesses: Beth, one of the witnesses pushing strollers, contemplates whether to call the police. She is relieved that her children were not disturbed by the accident and hopes it won't disrupt their sleep, but she remains uncertain about how long it will take to settle them down again.

4. Another character you insert in the scene: Max, a character inserted into the scene, reflects on the accident from a different perspective. Observing from her window seat at McDonald's, she criticizes Dylan for not noticing the truck and sips her coffee thoughtfully, acknowledging the reminder of her own past loss.