This is my conclusion to my surveillance essay. Can someone help me revise this or suggest any changes. I tried to make the conclusion as mature as possible to be a college/ university type of conclusion. Any further suggestions would be much appreciated.

*I used "society" multiple times. What can I use to replace "society" for the sentence to still make sense?
* What else can I say other than "people's lives" ?
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1.) A surveillance society strikes a slight fear to civil liberties. 2.) The establishment of a supervision system imposing on society instills a fear factor, threatens privacy, and minimizes freedom. 3.) A monitoring device affects society and people's lives in general. 4.) While the creation of an espionage-like society begins and increases, concern, uneasiness, and anxiety remains. 5.) An observation system not only conflicts with society, but it profoundly impacts human daily activities.

1. I'd eliminate "slight."

Check this site for synonyms.

http://www.thesaurus.com/browse/society?s=t

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that conclusion was even more of a fail than the attempted murder of the pope -__-

Here's a revised version of your conclusion:

"The prevalence of surveillance raises concerns regarding civil liberties. The implementation of a monitoring system that encroaches upon our lives instills a sense of fear, jeopardizes privacy, and restricts freedom. The impact of these surveillance measures expands beyond the individual, affecting broader societal dynamics. As a society veers towards a surveillance state, feelings of concern, unease, and anxiety continue to grow. This observation system not only challenges societal norms but also deeply influences the daily experiences of individuals."

To replace the word "society," you could potentially use "community," "population," or "collective."

For an alternative phrase instead of "people's lives," you could consider "individual existence," "personal experiences," or "the daily realities of individuals."