DOES THIS SOUND GOOD?

Revise the sentences below to improve fluency. Specifically, add variety to the sentence types, and use transitional words so that sentences flow smoothly.
18. Summer is my favorite season. I enjoy the warm weather. School ends. I like to go swimming, have picnics, and relax. I hope you like the summer, too.

My Answer:
My favorite season is summer because I like to enjoy the warm weather when school ends. Swimming, having picnics, and relaxing are other wonderful reasons I love summer. I hope that you like summer, too.

It does, but a better answer would be:

My favorite season is summer because I love to cherish the warm weather when school ends. Swimming, experiencing delightful laid-back picnics, and relaxing are other phenomenal reasons I love summer. I hope that you love summer just as much as I do.

Really good revisions! Yes!!

I know this is REALLY late but this sounds really good!!

Summer is like a warm blanket that wraps around me, making it my favorite season. Not only does school end, but I also have the perfect excuse to go swimming, have picnics, and just relax. So, here's hoping that you also embrace the amazingness of summer!

You must be an intellectual being @blair

students experience during the summer. Schools should implement summer reading programs to help combat this summer setback. Engaging summer reading programs help to foster lifelong readers. Reading over the summer helps children keep their literacy skills up, and with a broader selection of books, the program can pique the interest of reluctant readers.

What is the author's purpose?
(1 point)
Responses

to outline the components of a strong summer reading program
to outline the components of a strong summer reading program
to show the ineffectiveness of summer reading programs in schools
to show the ineffectiveness of summer reading programs in schools
to show the benefits of summer reading programs in schools
to show the benefits of summer reading programs in schools
to explain how children should spend their summers

Your revised sentences are much more fluent and flow smoothly. You have added variety to the sentence types and used transitional words to connect ideas. This helps the reader follow along and understand the sequence of information being presented. Well done!