oh i forgot to put in my original draft, which i also forgot to say it was a rough draft. my rough draft needs to have multiparagraph, insights, transitions, and that i wrote a narrative.

rough draft: choices
An incident from my circle map is when I chose to do homework later and to study later and I woke up late which was around 4 A.M. and I cursed at myself because I thought it was impossible to do all my homework within an hour. Other reasons are that I hated waking up late because at 5 A.M. that's when I take a shower (which takes long) and I prepare my food (if I have time), brush my teeth (also takes long), and I had to take bus at around 6 A.M.
It was really stressful to finish so much in an hour because most of the work would be due that day and also it rushes me to finish one work then move on to the other, and if other work are not due that day then I won't think too much about it and think I can do it later, then I will just pile it on to my next work which is not fun.
Most of the time when I end up not doing my homework is because I get distracted by electronics (at home) or thinking that I should take a break by sleeping (and my naps are long, wasting time) or if I have to wake up to do my homework and it's early I just go back to sleep and think for a little bit and I end up sleeping an hour and rushing to do my home work.

When I rush to do my homework I do get them done, but they most likely have errors which is why I hate waking up late and rushing to do my homework. Even now I still do my homework. Even now I still do this, having to wake up early and think it's no big deal then waking up late and rush.

Now, I won't be rushing like that no more, I will tell or convince my self that you're going to not finish your work if you don't wake up or not putting that device down. I also won't make wrong dumb choices that lead to obvious consequences.
The consequences of this incident is me thinking, wow what an irresponsible lazy person and that always makes me mad at myself. Also, that I would cry to my self inside (depends on how much work) and I would blame on others for not waking me up when they had to or not. So, basically I lower myself or my esteem because of this.
My response to this incident is you really need to think about the consequences anon, and if you can't because you're to tired, then think what would happen and think think to wake up and be wide awake. Also, that you are really lazy and stupid, and I'm disappointed at you for picking that device up and thinking that you can do your homework later even when your parents advised you to do them. So, from this day and onwards, I will think about the consequences and to my homework early.

i didn't edit any thing of my rough draft (or atleast i think so) so there are errors that i see which i can revise now. sorry that i posted the other half of my rough draft as an answer because i accidentally pressed a key or keys that made me submit my question early.
tank you very much tutors.

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To revise your rough draft and incorporate the required elements - multiple paragraphs, insights, transitions, and a narrative - you can follow these steps:

1. Start by organizing your thoughts into paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a specific aspect or idea related to your chosen incident. For example:

Paragraph 1: Introduction of the incident and its consequences.
Paragraph 2: Explanation of why you chose to postpone doing homework and the resulting consequences.
Paragraph 3: Discussion of the stress caused by rushing to finish work in a limited amount of time.
Paragraph 4: Identification of common distractions that prevent you from completing homework and their impact.

2. Ensure that each paragraph contains insights or reflective thoughts about your choices and their consequences. These insights will provide a deeper understanding of your experience. For example:

Paragraph 1: Reflect on your initial decision to prioritize other activities over homework and how it impacted your morning routine and time management.
Paragraph 2: Share your frustration and regret for underestimating the time required to complete your homework. Reflect on how this experience taught you the importance of managing your time effectively.
Paragraph 3: Discuss the feelings of stress and pressure that arose from having to rush through your assignments in a short period. Reflect on how this situation made you realize the importance of planning and prioritizing your tasks to avoid such stress.
Paragraph 4: Examine the various distractions that hinder your progress and reflect on the need to stay focused. Consider strategies for managing distractions and maintaining productivity.

3. Use transitional phrases or sentences to connect your paragraphs and ensure a smooth flow of ideas. These transitions will help the reader navigate through your narrative seamlessly. For example:

Paragraph 1: "As I reflect on my decisions, I realize how my choice to delay my homework had far-reaching consequences. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the challenges and insights I gained from this incident."
Paragraph 2: "Moreover, my initial decision to postpone my homework not only affected my morning routine but also highlighted the importance of effective time management."
Paragraph 3: "The sense of stress and pressure that accompanied the rushed completion of my assignments served as a valuable lesson in prioritizing and planning my tasks."
Paragraph 4: "Furthermore, recognizing the distractions that often hinder my progress has led me to appreciate the need for focus and productivity strategies."

4. Make sure to infuse a narrative tone throughout your writing. This will help engage your readers and bring your experience to life. Use vivid language, personal anecdotes, and sensory details to create a compelling narrative. For example:

Paragraph 1: "The alarm blared at an ungodly hour of 4 A.M., jolting me awake. As I groggily cursed myself for my poor choices the night before, I realized the gravity of my predicament."
Paragraph 2: "With heavy eyelids and a racing mind, I embarked on a race against time. The pile of textbooks and assignments stared back at me, mocking my procrastination."
Paragraph 3: "Minutes turned into seconds, and before I knew it, dawn was breaking, casting an unforgiving light on my unfinished work. The stress was palpable, compressing my chest and clouding my thoughts."
Paragraph 4: "Amidst buzzing phones and beckoning beds, I grappled with the constant temptation to stray from my responsibilities. Through this experience, I discovered the immense importance of staying focused, determined, and present."

By following these steps, you can transform your rough draft into a more structured, insightful, and engaging narrative that meets the requirements of a multiparagraph, insightful, transitional, and narrative-driven piece.