Hello, can you correct my Constructed Responce.
The story is: Driving Age
Mary O'Dell
Constructed Response Question:
1. “At eighteen, people are more mature and better able to make mature decisions."
Identify the common propaganda technique that is being used here, and explain why this statement is an example of this technique.
2. Explain how the author is biased on her subject. Use evidence from the text to support your response.
The common propaganda technique the author used helped explain how the author is biased based upon her subject. Her common propaganda technique is an example of plain folk because she is trying to persuade the readers to support her idea or reasoning that eighteen year olds are more mature and are able to make better decisions. Some examples of this being the common propaganda technique plain folk is when she stated in the passage that “Right now, 15 year olds can get a practice permit, and try for their license at 16. This is too young. Eighteen is a better age.” And “I’m eighteen now, but when I was fifteen I was not mature enough to drive. No way! None of my classmates were mature enough either”. The reason this evidence supports my answer is because it shows that she is arguing the fact that any age under eighteen should not be driving. She gives a strong argument and personal experience. Lastly, the reason this author is biased is because she strongly believes in her argument. An example is when she said “This is obvious. Not all eighteen-year-olds are mature but the majority of them are. At least we are more mature than fifteen-year-olds.” For all of these reasons the common propaganda technique the author used helped explain how the author is biased based upon her subject.
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Here's the corrected version:
The author of the story, Mary O'Dell, employs the common propaganda technique known as "plain folk" in order to persuade readers to support her idea that eighteen-year-olds are more mature and able to make better decisions. The use of this technique can be seen in statements such as "Right now, 15-year-olds can get a practice permit, and try for their license at 16. This is too young. Eighteen is a better age" and "I'm eighteen now, but when I was fifteen I was not mature enough to drive. No way! None of my classmates were mature enough either." These statements provide examples of the author arguing that anyone below the age of eighteen should not be allowed to drive, incorporating personal experience and strong arguments to support her viewpoint.
Furthermore, the author's strong belief in her argument indicates her bias. For instance, when she states, "This is obvious. Not all eighteen-year-olds are mature, but the majority of them are. At least we are more mature than fifteen-year-olds," it becomes clear that she is firmly entrenched in her position. This bias is evident throughout the text, as the author advocates for the driving age to be set at eighteen and dismisses the idea of younger ages as being too immature. In conclusion, the author's use of the plain folk propaganda technique serves to highlight her bias on the subject of the driving age.