this sentence has faulty parallelism and i need to correct it. "Jessa is tall, slender, and has brown hair."
I think it's Jessa is tall, slender with brown hair. OR Jessa is tall and slender. She has a brown hair. What do you think? please help thank you!!
tall
slender
has brown hair
That is faulty because it has two adjectives and a verb phrase.
You need to make it have 3 adjectives or 3 verb phrases. Which will you choose?
brown hair
Jessa is ... brown hair. <~~??
How about this?
Jessa is tall, slender, and brunette.
i mean brown-haired? isnt that acceptable? well okay i'll go with your answer.. thank you so much :D
Yes, "brown-haired" would work, too.
To correct the faulty parallelism in the sentence "Jessa is tall, slender, and has brown hair," you can choose one of the following options:
1. Jessa is tall, slender, and has brown hair.
Explanation: The original sentence includes a parallel list of descriptive traits about Jessa: tall, slender, and has brown hair. Here, all three items in the list are written in parallel structure, making it grammatically correct.
2. Jessa is tall and slender, with brown hair.
Explanation: In this revised version, the two parallel traits, "tall" and "slender," are combined with an adjective phrase, "with brown hair." This maintains parallelism since both parallel traits are now in the same form: "tall and slender."
Your second suggestion, "Jessa is tall and slender. She has brown hair," separates the description into two sentences rather than maintaining parallelism. While it is grammatically correct, it does not fix the faulty parallelism in the original sentence.
Overall, the first and second options mentioned above are both correct, but the choice depends on your personal preference and the context in which the sentence is being used.