Rewrite the over coordinated sentences that follow, changing clauses into phrases or into single words. where appropriate, break the over coordinated sentence into two sentences.
1. The doctor inserted one end of a long tube into my throat, and she attached the other end of the tube to a machine, and that machine was a vacuum pump.
Mine: The doctor inserted one end of a long tube into my throat, while she attached the other end to a vacuum pump machine.
2. The Little Theatre rehearsed a new play, and it was a "who-dun-it,"and it was by Agatha Christie, and auditions were open to the public.
I'm not quite sure how to do it, please help! Thank you!
The Little Theatre's auditions for the new play, an Agatha Christie "who-dun-it," were open to the public.
Thank you Ms. Sue! But does my correction of #1 work? Is it correct?
You're welcome, Katie.
Your first sentence is fine.
1. The doctor inserted one end of a long tube into my throat. She attached the other end to a vacuum pump machine.
2. The Little Theatre rehearsed a new play. It was a "who-dun-it" by Agatha Christie. Auditions were open to the public.