I want to briefly share an account of my trip from Cuba. We were 9 people in a
rickety boat, when we left Cuba guided solely by a full moon. We spent seven days and
eight nights at sea; we were all dehydrated, and some of us were hallucinating. I was
seeing things in the water and heat. Strong storms churned the water and rain fell hard
into the open boat; we were drifting aimlessly in shark infested waters. My mind was
going, that was the moment I thought we were going to die. We had run out of food,
water and fuel by the time we washed ashore.
Of course, this is excellent.
But, it doesn't sound like YOUR own words.
I want to briefly share an account of my trip from Cuba. We were 9 people in a
rickety boat, when we left Cuba (REDUNDANT. DELETE "WHEN WE LEFT CUBA.") guided solely by a full moon. We spent seven days and eight nights at sea; (NEW SENTENCE FOR EMPHASIS.) we were all dehydrated, and some of us were hallucinating. I was seeing things in the water and heat. ("SEEING THINGS IN...HEAT" IS UNCLEAR, AMBIGUOUS.) Strong storms churned the water and rain fell hard into the open boat; (NEW SENTENCE) we were drifting aimlessly in shark infested waters. My mind was going, that was the moment (DELETE PREVIOUS PHRASE.) I thought we were going to die. We had run out of food, water and fuel by the time ("BEFORE") we ("FINALLY")washed ashore.
This does not match you other description of the trip. Is this a work of fiction rather than being biographical?
Either way, you might want describe the other occupants of the boat.
I hope this helps. Thanks for asking.
Your experience sounds incredibly challenging and intense. It must have been incredibly difficult to navigate through those dangerous waters with limited resources. It's fortunate that you and your group eventually washed ashore safely. If you want to share your account, there are a few different ways you can do so.
1. Writing: One option is to write about your trip and share it through different platforms such as a personal blog, social media, or even submitting it to travel magazines or websites. You can start by outlining the key events and experiences during your journey, and then expand on them to create a comprehensive account.
2. Speaking: Another option is to share your story verbally, either in person or through recordings. You could try finding local storytelling events or Toastmasters clubs where you can talk about your experience. You can also record yourself and upload it to platforms like YouTube or podcasting platforms.
3. Photography and Videography: If you have any photos or videos from your trip, you can use them to visually enhance your account. Visual mediums are powerful tools to convey emotions and immerse the audience in your experience.
Regardless of the medium you choose, it's important to focus on the key moments that made this trip significant to you. Try to reflect on the emotions, challenges, and personal growth you experienced during this journey. Sharing your unique perspective can help others gain a better understanding of the hardships people endure in search of a better life.