The agricultural revolution marked a decisive turning point in human history. What evidence might you offer to support this claim, and how might you argue against it?
That's the essay question. I'm in college so i'm expected to give a really good essay but i suck. below is a introduction i wrote. can you please read it and give me constructive criticism. the thesis is the last sentence. Is the thesis good enough or should i work on it more?
The agricultural revolution is known as one of the great milestones to exist in human development. It can be defined as a gradual change from our ancestors of the Stone Age and Paleolithic Era who focused more on hunting and gathering for food and survival to instead emphasizing more on the production of food. Over time, as much as the agriculture revolution resulted in developing a more systematic way of living life for people, some groups did not follow the lead and were more comfortable living as hunters and gatherers. Being able to farm and produce their own food led people to an overall development of social, economic and political of the Mesopotamian Civilization, but it can also be argued that the transition to farming took some values from our ancestors we can’t have again.
i had trouble wording the thesis? is it run on or is there a simple way of saying it?
Im doing this in middle school LOL it sucks.... :(
I can't judge your introduction without knowing the content of your paper.
However, your thesis is too wordy; it should be shorter. In addition, I think you left a word out after "political."
Study this site for recommendations about good thesis statements.
http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
Consider developing the last clause of your thesis statement. How did the agricultural revolution take some values from our ancestors? Which values?
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Your introduction provides a solid overview of the agricultural revolution and its significance in human development. However, your thesis statement could be strengthened by making it more concise and focused. Here's an improved version:
"The agricultural revolution revolutionized human societies by shifting from a hunting and gathering lifestyle to a more systematic production of food. While this transition led to significant advancements in social, economic, and political aspects of civilizations like Mesopotamia, it also came at the cost of losing certain values inherited from our ancestors."
This revised thesis statement highlights the transformative nature of the agricultural revolution and sets up your essay to discuss both the positive and negative impacts of this shift in human history.