How should revise these sentences so that they are still three sentences?
"Ten years after the Trojan War, Odysseus departs from the goddess Calypso's island and arrives in Phoenicia, ruled by Alcinous. Offering Odysseus a ship to return him to his homeland, Alcinous asks Odysseus to tell him of his adventures. Filled with the desire to return to his home, Odysseus then proceeds to tell Alcinous about the war in Troy, landing upon an island known as Ismarus, his soldiers dismantling the town of the island, and losing numerous benches of men on each of his twelve ships after engaging in battle with the Cicones army."
I have no idea.
That last sentence is WAAAAYYY too long and includes at least one misplaced modifier.
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/modifiers.htm#misplaced
Is it magic or something to have to have only 3 sentences??!!
I must write a 3-sentence summary.
Ten years after the Trojan War, Odysseus leaves Calypso's island and arrives in Phoenicia, whose king offered a ship and asked about Odysseus's adventures. Odysseus tells King Alcinous about the war in Troy and how he has lost nearly all his men.
To revise these sentences while still keeping them as three sentences, consider the following:
1. Ten years after the Trojan War, Odysseus departs from the goddess Calypso's island and arrives in Phoenicia, ruled by Alcinous. Upon his arrival, Alcinous offers Odysseus a ship to return to his homeland, and in return, asks to hear of his adventures.
2. Filled with the desire to return home, Odysseus proceeds to tell Alcinous about the war in Troy, his landing on the island of Ismarus, and the subsequent dismantling of the town by his soldiers. Additionally, he shares the tale of the losses his men suffered in battles with the Cicones army, losing numerous benches of men on each of his twelve ships.
3. As Odysseus recounts his adventures to Alcinous, he describes the war in Troy, his arrival on the island of Ismarus, and the destruction of the town by his soldiers. Moreover, he narrates the battles with the Cicones army that resulted in the loss of numerous benches of men on each of his twelve ships.
Remember that when revising sentences, it is important to maintain clarity and coherence while condensing the content into fewer sentences.