Concision
Rewrite the sentences using concision techniques (replacing phrases with words, combining sentences, etc.) discussed in class to simply these wordy sentences.
a)Your explanation concerning your comatose state during the required reporting period was not accepted by our claim evaluation system as a valid reason for failing to apply in a timely fashion.
---> Your explanation regarding comatose state
was not accepted due to failing to apply on time.
b) Critical-care nursing is stressful due to the fact that the patients have life-threatening illnesses. Critical-care nurses must have steady nerves to care for patients who are critically ill and very sick. The nurses must also not lack possession of medical and interpersonal skills. It is considered by most health-care professionals that these nurses are an essential factor in the improvement
----> In order to deal with patients that have life threatening illness, the critical-care nurses should not lack possessions of medical and interpersonal skills which are essential factors in the improvement of patients' health.
a. Your explanation regarding your comatose state was not accepted because you failed to apply on time.
b. To deal with patients that have life threatening illness, the critical-care nurses should not lack medical and interpersonal skills, essential factors in the improvement of patients' health.
a) Your explanation about being comatose during the reporting period was not accepted because you failed to apply on time.
b) Critical-care nursing is stressful as patients have life-threatening illnesses. Critical-care nurses must possess medical and interpersonal skills, as they play an essential role in improving patients' health.