Please check my essay for any grammar errors and anything, because my English teacher grades HARD and I really want a 100 on this essay. I spend HOURS writing this and I really appreciate if you check.
Thank You! :)
here it is:
Civil disobedience is "refusal to obey laws as a way of forcing the government to do or change something for nonviolent means" (Merriam Webster Dictionary). Great leaders broke the law and changed the world for the better. Without their civil disobedience, the world will never be it is today. John T. Scopes, Rosa Parks, and Susan B. Anthony were all audacious civil disobedients who fought for what is right.
One act of civil disobedience, biology teacher named John T. Scopes who fought for what he believed. Scopes was arrested for teaching the theory of evolution to his class on April 24th from Hunter's Civic Biology textbook. By law, public school teachers were allowed to teach only the Biblical account of the Creation. This trial took place in Dayton, Tennessee in 1925. He was found guilty of violating a Tennessee law that made it illegal to teach the Theory of Evolution in public schools. and was fined one hundred dollars, but the conviction was later reversed because of small legal error. During trial, Judge Raulston asked Mr. Scopes if he has anything to say. His voice trembled a little as he folded his arms and said "I feel that I have been convicted of violating an unjust statute. I will continue in the future, as I have in the past, to oppose the law in any way that I can" (John T. Scopes as qtd in The New York Times). Students today can learn Darwin's Theory in public schools due to Mr. Scopes' obligation
Another notable American civil disobedient was Rosa Parks, who fought for civil rights for black people. On December 1, 1955, Parks was arrested & fine $14 dollars for not giving up her seat to a white man on the Cleveland venue bus. The reason why Rosa Parks did not give up her seat to the white man is because she was tired of working all day and was tired of being made to feel inferior because of her skin color. One of the main results of Rosa’s arrest and conviction was the attention the events involving her got from around the country. The women's Political council protested her arrest by organizing a boycott of the buses. Lasting over a decade, the mass movement of non-violent social change that started in Montgomery culminated in the Civil Rights Act of 1964, the Voting Rights Act of 1965, and the Fair Housing Act of 1968. On April 1999, Bill Clinton award her the Congressional Gold Metal, the country's highest civilian honor. Rosa Parks’ words and actions showed that she persevered in order stop the segregation laws. A statue of Parks is place in the United States Capitol's National Statuary Hall, "further immortalizing Parks' lifelong commitment to freedom, social justice and equality in American history" (The African American Almanac, Narins, Brigham). Without her words and actions the United States will still be segregated.
Susan B. Anthony fought for women's right to vote. Anthony attempts to register to vote in Rochester because of the 14th Amendment. She votes in the federal election the straight Republican ticket on November 5,1872. Anthony was arrested at her home and charged with illegal voting in 1873. She was sentenced to pay a fine of $100 and the costs of prosecution. She refused to pay. In order to get women right to vote, Anthony travels around the area giving a lecture entitle, "Is it a Crime for a Citizen of the United States to Vote?". On January 12, 1874, Anthony submits a two-page petition to Congress asking that the unjust fine for illegal voting be remitted. Congress does not at on petition. The Nineteenth Amendment is adopted on August 26, 1920. Without her interminability, women would not have the right to vote today.
btw ---- i didn't write the conclusion so I'm working on it right now.
What were the instructions for this essay?
My question is the same as MsSue's.
The last sentence in the first paragraph needs some work...
<<audacious civil disobedients who fought for what is right...
..daring civil disobedients who fought for that which they believed was right.
The rest needs a lot of work, and the question Sue and I have, however, one sentence sticks out needing change, the last: do you really mean interminability? I would change that to determination, or similar.
Create a five paragraph essay based on the documents and on your knowledge of the topic. Be sre to include all the following:
- A definition of civil disobedience
Body paragraph using examples from the documents, prior knowledge, and class discussions.
Your stance on civil disobedience as a way to respond to an unjust law and effect change. Your opinion should develop a clear argument for/or against an individual's decision to take the law into his or her own hands. Supper your assertion by citing key pieces of evidence from the documents.
exactly where did you do any of this?
<<Your stance on civil disobedience as a way to respond to an unjust law and effect change. Your opinion should develop a clear argument for/or against an individual's decision to take the law into his or her own hands.>>
she gave us us this packet full of information about rosa parks, john t. scopes, and susan b Anthony
she want us to use these DOCUMENTS to support my opinion
and QUOTES to support my ideas
i cant use outside info.
Let me ask again: where is your opinion for/against an individuals decision...?
You have described pretty well your packet of info, but not so well on your opinion and your arguements.
i cant use we or I in my essay
<<Your stance on civil disobedience as a way to respond to an unjust law and effect change. Your opinion should develop a clear argument for/or against an individual's decision to take the law into his or her own hands.>>
That is the assignment, you haven't done it. Don't use I, or we. One can argue a point endlessly without that. One can use the anonymous "one".
Somehow, you have to give your opinion, and develope a clear arguement.
example: What Rosa Parks did, was clearly for the good. How she did it, created controversy, and strife, but there was no other clear way to...
Was opinion stated there? Was "I" or "me" used.