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Holden Caulfield in “Catcher in the Rye”, seems to be obsessed with mortality and youthful innocence, both of which are embodied in James Castle and Allie Caulfield. Holden demonstrates these infatuations in his conversation with Phoebe.
At first, Phoebe is asking Holden to name at least one thing that he likes. Holden just can’t seem to focus, as what immediately comes to mind is this boy “[he] used to know at Elkton hills” who had stood up for himself, in the face of bullies, even though he was a “skinny, weak-looking guy”. This boy, James Castle, had been bullied to the point of “jump[ing] out the window”. Although Holden skips over the details of what these bullies did to him since they are “too repulsive”, he seems to languish in sharing the even more gruesome details of James’ death, “his teeth, and blood were all over the place”. The imagery with which Holden describes this scene, suggests that he has thought about this death many times. He doesn’t sound shocked though, he makes James Castle’s death seem almost noble, “instead of taking back what [James] said, he jumped”. Holden sounds as if he himself has contemplated the idea of suicide, James’ being so simple. It reinforces the idea that Holden is trying to save his own innocence, and in a way, James’ innocence was saved through the fact that he no longer was going to risk that chance of becoming a phony. Holden continues to draw connections between himself and James Castle, recalling that “[James] had on this turtleneck sweater that [Holden] had lent him” and how “ [James’] name was right ahead of [his] at roll call”. He alludes to seeing a resemblance of perfection in death, as it fulfills Holden’s love for unchanging things, and his belief that youthful innocence is the epitome of perfection.
In the next section, after Holden realizes that Phoebe has been speaking to him, Phoebe proclaims that “[Holden] can’t even think of one thing [that he likes”. Holden, his mind still seeming to be on James, asserts that “[He] like[s] Allie”. Phoebe, exasperated, snaps at him that “if somebody’s dead and all, then [it doesn’t count]”. Holden appears to be the only one who can’t, or won’t, let go of Allie. Holden displays some of his own innocence in his child like anger, “ Just because somebody’s dead you don’t just stop liking them [...] especially if they were about a thousand times nicer than the people you know that are alive and all”. Holden’s inability to let go of a sibling’s death, is reminiscent of a child mourning the loss of their pet, refusing to let it be replaced, and refusing to let anyone else in, yet in so much pain. Holden’s own remaining innocence refuses to let him fully acknowledge Allie’s death.

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Holden Caulfield, the protagonist of "Catcher in the Rye," appears to be fixated on mortality and youthful innocence, which are personified by James Castle and Allie Caulfield. Holden demonstrates this infatuation during his conversation with Phoebe.

Initially, Phoebe asks Holden to name something he likes. Holden struggles to focus and immediately thinks of a boy he used to know at Elkton Hills. This boy, James Castle, stood up for himself against bullies despite being thin and weak. James was eventually bullied to the point of jumping out of a window. Although Holden avoids describing the repulsive acts committed against James, he dwells on the gruesome details of his death, such as his teeth and blood scattered everywhere. The vivid imagery used by Holden suggests that he has contemplated James' death extensively. Surprisingly, Holden does not express shock but rather portrays James Castle's death as honorable, stating that instead of retracting his words, James chose to jump. This implies that Holden may have contemplated suicide himself, finding simplicity in James' decision. It reinforces the idea that Holden is striving to preserve his own innocence, just as James Castle's innocence was preserved by his refusal to compromise his integrity. Holden further connects himself to James Castle by recalling that he had lent him a turtleneck sweater and how their names were next to each other on the roll call. This allusion suggests that Holden identifies a sense of perfection in death, as it fulfills his desire for things to remain unchanged and his belief that youthful innocence represents perfection.

In the next section, after realizing that Phoebe has been speaking to him, Phoebe asserts that Holden cannot even think of one thing he likes. Holden, still preoccupied with thoughts of James, declares that he likes Allie. Phoebe, frustrated, retorts that if someone is dead, it does not count. Holden seems to be the only one unable or unwilling to let go of Allie. In his childlike anger, he displays a portion of his own innocence by insisting, "Just because somebody's dead, you don't just stop liking them...especially if they were a thousand times nicer than the people you know who are alive." Holden's inability to let go of his sibling's death is reminiscent of a child mourning the loss of a beloved pet, refusing to accept a replacement and shutting out others while experiencing immense pain. His remaining innocence prevents him from fully acknowledging Allie's death.

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