can someone help me to correct it?
this message address to international employee. Message intend to announce a revenue drop caused by intensive competitive pressure
Howdy guys! Shouldn’t surprise anyone that we took a beating this year, given the insane pricing moves our knucklehead competitors have been making. I mean how those clowns can keep turning a profit is beyond me, what with steel costs still going through the roof and labour costs heating up – even in countries where everybody goes to find cheap labour – and hazardous waste disposal regs adding to operating costs too.
Yikes! What an awful conglomeration of slang and idioms! Obviously, the whole memo needs to be completely rewritted.
I'll be glad to check your edited version.
what do you thinks about this?
Ladies and Gentlemen:
As you were informed, the company’s profit has resulted in relatively intensive pressure to push for tighter controls over all aspects of the business. Competitors in this field have grown stronger and smarter, that has prompted all of us to search for ways to cut costs. At the same time, production is facing cost increase on several fronts. Management will expect your support and cooperation.
Moreover, marketing and advertising costs are expected to increase as we attempt to strengthen these activities to better cope with competitive pressure.
Thank you for you time and help.
Can someone take a look ?
Of course, I'd be happy to help you improve your message. Here's a corrected version:
Dear International Employees,
I hope you are all doing well. I wanted to address an important matter regarding our company's recent financial performance. Unfortunately, I have to inform you that we have experienced a decrease in revenue due to intense competitive pressure in the market.
It is no surprise that we have faced challenges this year, as our competitors have made aggressive pricing moves. Their strategies have put significant pressure on our sales and profitability. It is truly astonishing how they manage to stay profitable, especially considering the escalating costs of steel and labor, even in countries traditionally known for low labor costs. Moreover, the costs associated with hazardous waste disposal regulations have also contributed to our overall operating expenses.
Despite these difficulties, I want to assure you that we are actively working on adjusting our strategies to navigate this competitive landscape. Our team is dedicated to finding innovative solutions and maximizing our efficiency in order to maintain our position in the industry.
I understand that this news may be discouraging, but it is crucial that we remain united and supportive of one another during challenging times. Together, we can overcome these obstacles and work towards a brighter future for our company.
If you have any questions or concerns, please feel free to reach out to me or your supervisors. We value your dedication and commitment to the company, and we appreciate your continued efforts.
Thank you for your understanding and cooperation.
Sincerely,
[Your Name]
[Your Position/Title]