essay outline
about the hero;s journey in fahrenheit 451?
What is your thesis statement?
What arguments do you need to support it?
I don't have a thesis yet, however I need to show how Fahrenheit 451 shows the hero's journey.
*Do you have
Please be as critical as possible
First thing I want you to do is read over this very carefully, I only read three sentences and you have a few minor mistakes.
Okay here is the second thing I have to say. your first paragraph should be your thesis, you opening paragraph. You are putting too much stuff out there at once. You have to start this story off by pulling your reader in not making them like, "Oh GOD!! man this seems boring already!! Too much stuff barely in the beginning!!" You want to make your reader so in to the essay that they can't stop reading and they will want to read it again! Trust me. I would know. I have received it before.
everything else is just excellent!! It sounds very professional! Also very interesting.
1. "protagonist.But, at first, GUy Montag"
Should be protagonist. But, at first, Guy Montag
2. "confusing.Guy Montag in Fahrenheit"
Should be confusing. Guy Montag in Fahrenheit
3. Instead of saying Guy as referring to him, you should say Montag. It is always the last name. Not the first name Eli.