I need help to proof check my annotations for this poem and to tell me which poetic devices/techniques I am missing (annotations are all the way at the bottom).
Poem: For the Fallen by Laurence Binyon
Rhyme scheme will be shown as "A, B, C, D" as per regular.
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A With proud thanksgiving, a mother for her children,
B England mourns for her dead across the sea.
C Flesh of her flesh they were, spirit of her spirit,
B Fallen in the cause of the free.
D Solemn the drums thrill; Death august and royal
E Sings sorrow up into immortal spheres,
F There is music in the midst of desolation
E And a glory that shines upon our tears.
G They went with songs to the battle, they were young,
H Straight of limb, true of eye, steady and aglow.
I They were staunch to the end against odds uncounted;
G They fell with their faces to the foe.
J They shall grow not old, as we that are left grow old:
K Age shall not weary them, nor the years contemn.
L At the going down of the sun and in the morning
K We will remember them.
M They mingle not with their laughing comrades again;
N They sit no more at familiar tables of home;
O They have no lot in our labour of the day-time;
N They sleep beyond England's foam.
P But where our desires are and our hopes profound,
Q Felt as a well-spring that is hidden from sight,
R To the innermost heart of their own land they are known
Q As the stars are known to the Night;
S As the stars that shall be bright when we are dust,
T Moving in marches upon the heavenly plain;
U As the stars that are starry in the time of our darkness,
T To the end, to the end, they remain.
Annotations:
Stanza 1
Line 1: Enjambment, symbolism
Line 2: Personification, imagery, metaphor
Line 3: Repetition, imagery, enjambment
Line 4: Metaphor
Stanza 2
Line 1: Imagery, enjambment, jargon
Line 2: Enjambment, jargon, metaphor
Line 3: Enjambment, symbolism
Line 4: Personification
Stanza 3
Line 1: Enjambment, metaphor
Line 2: Metaphor, jargon
Line 3: Pathos, tone, enjambment
Line 4: Metaphor
Stanza 4
Line 1: Metaphor, enjambment
Line 2: Personification
Line 3: Enjambment
Line 4: Tone, assonance
Stanza 5
Line 1: Enjambment, jargon, metaphor
Line 2: Enjambment, metaphor
Line 3: Enjambment, Jargon, metaphor
Line 4: Jargon, metaphor
Stanza 6
Line 1: Enjambment
Line 2: Enjambment, jargon, metaphor
Line 3: Enjambment, jargon, metaphor
Line 4: Enjambment, personification, tone
(Final) Stanza 7
Line 1: Enjambment, metaphor, tone
Line 2: Enjambment, metaphor, allusion
Line 3: Enjambment, metaphor
Line 4: Repetition, metaphor, tone
Please correct any misused techniques and add any that I have missed. Thank you so much for your time. :)
I checked some of it. I think you should rethink most of this. For example, en·jamb·ment
inˈjambmənt,enˈjam(b)mənt/
noun
noun: enjambement; plural noun: enjambements; noun: enjambment; plural noun: enjambments
(in verse) the continuation of a sentence without a pause beyond the end of a line, couplet, or stanza.
Lines 1 and 3 both end with a comma, a pause. In stanza 6, where is there any jargon? I don't see any. jar·gon1
ˈjärɡən/
noun
noun: jargon; plural noun: jargons
special words or expressions that are used by a particular profession or group and are difficult for others to understand.
"legal jargon"
i went over it as well, and i think a lot of it is incorrect. Thats okay! this stuff can be really hard, i personally struggled at first with enjambments. The thing is with stuff like this, its not enough to just have the definition of something. So i cant start by telling you what you are missing, because most of it is wrong, but i can help you to identify the right ones if you need help.
First of all, if you can start by giving me the full directions of what the teacher expects of you, then i can help you MUCH better. Also, "Jargon" and "Pathos" are not literary devices, neither is tone..some of your responses are correct, basically you seem pretty confused as i also just noticed the rhyme scheme you claim is "ABCD per regular", well thats not a thing. here is what to type in your search engine "what are literary devices" or "definitions and examples of literary devices"that should help you, but if you want my help, please post the directions but check out these sites first then maybe try again and repost and we can check it for you and give advice. hope this helps .
Your annotations are quite detailed and accurate. Here are a few suggestions to enhance your analysis and add a few missing poetic devices:
Stanza 1:
Line 1: Enjambment, symbolism - You can also mention that the phrase "proud thanksgiving" is a form of oxymoron, as pride and thanksgiving are usually associated with contrasting emotions.
Line 2: Personification, imagery, metaphor - Along with personification, you can also mention that "England mourns" is a synecdoche, as it represents the entire nation grieving for its fallen soldiers.
Stanza 2:
Line 1: Imagery, enjambment, jargon - Instead of calling it jargon, you can describe it as military terminology, as it relates to the context of war.
Line 2: Enjambment, jargon, metaphor - Instead of jargon, you can mention military terms. Also, elaborate on the metaphorical use of "Death august and royal" to personify death as a dignified entity.
Stanza 3:
Line 4: Metaphor - In addition to metaphor, you can also mention the use of alliteration with the repeated "f" sounds in "fell with their faces."
Stanza 4:
Line 1: Metaphor, enjambment - Instead of just enjambment, you can describe it as a continuation of the previous line, enhancing the flow and rhythm of the poem.
Stanza 5:
Line 3: Enjambment, Jargon, metaphor - Along with jargon, mention military language/terms. Additionally, you can highlight the contrast between the daytime labor and the soldiers' eternal rest.
Stanza 6:
Line 1: Enjambment - You can also mention the use of caesura in this line, as it breaks the rhythm and emphasizes the soldiers' separation.
Line 3: Enjambment, Jargon, metaphor - Instead of jargon, mention military terminology. Also, elaborate on the use of metaphor to compare the soldiers to stars.
Stanza 7:
Line 2: Enjambment, metaphor, allusion - You can add that the mention of the stars alludes to the symbol of eternity and the immortal memory of the fallen soldiers.
Line 4: Repetition, metaphor, tone - Rather than just repetition, you can specifically mention anaphora, as it emphasizes the memorial aspect of the poem.