I need my rewritten paragraph to be checked for proper spelling, grammar, run-on sentences etc.
Original: Scientists report that creatures living in the deep sea are in danger of starving to death. Millions of undiscovered species live, in the deep sea. Creatures in the seabed are suffering from growing food shortages. Which may be a result of rising sea temperatures. Scientists believe that some species will die out, those that can survive on a low food supply will continue living. Not much is known about the creatures that live in the deep sea, not much is known about the changes in their diets. Scientists estimate that up to 10 million species live in the depths of the sea. Most animals of the deep rely on food chains that begin. In the lighted realms of the sea. Microscopic plants called phytoplankton. Capture the sun and start the food cycle. Wherever there are animal droppings, there is a constant rain of organic matter that feeds the bottom dwellers.
Rewritten: Scientists report that creatures living in the deep sea are in danger of starving to death. Millions of undiscovered species live in the deep sea. Creatures in the seabed are suffering from growing food shortages, which may be a result of rising sea temperatures. Scientists believe that some species will die out and those that can survive on a low food supply will continue living. Not much is known about the creatures that live in the deep sea or about the changes in their diets. Scientists estimate that up to 10 million species live in the depths of the sea. Most animals of the deep rely on food chains that begin in the lighted realms of the sea. Microscopic plants called phytoplankton capture the sun and start the food cycle. Wherever there are animal droppings there is a constant rain of organic matter that feeds the bottom dwellers.
Is there anymore changes I could make to this?
I would put the sentence millions of undiscovered species live in the deep sea, in front of the sentence about scientists estimating that there could be 10 million species. Or you could just not add it in the paragraph. Instead of lighted realms I would but lighter parts but either is fine. I think that is all.
Okay, Thank you.
Great job on the rewrite! Your paragraph is much clearer and more concise. However, I noticed a few more changes you could make to improve the overall flow and coherence:
Rewritten: Scientists report that creatures living in the deep sea are in danger of starving to death due to growing food shortages. In the deep sea, millions of undiscovered species reside. Seabed creatures are particularly affected by these shortages, potentially caused by rising sea temperatures. Scientists predict that certain species will perish, while those capable of surviving on a limited food supply will persist. Unfortunately, there is limited knowledge about the deep-sea inhabitants and their dietary changes. Approximately 10 million species are estimated to inhabit the sea's depths. Most deep-sea animals rely on food chains originating in the illuminated realms of the sea, where microscopic plants known as phytoplankton harness the sun's energy, initiating the food cycle. Additionally, the constant rain of organic matter from animal droppings sustains the bottom-dwelling organisms.
These changes aim to improve sentence structure and flow while maintaining the clarity of your original rewrite. Keep in mind that further revisions may be necessary based on context or specific requirements.