I wrote this essay, i would like to know if is Ok. Thanks
Nowadays, Travelling is the kind of activity, which almost all the people love. For some people it is an opportunity to relax and abstract from everyday busy life. For others it is interesting to learn about other cultures.
Of course, there are people who are always unhappy with the way the life is, and they will say that travelling is unpleasant and involves a lot of stress due to the necessity to pack their things, use public transport and so on. But fortunately, those people are rather few.
As for me, travelling is exciting and interesting. I would like to travel to different countries, experiencing cultures and trying different foods.
The first advantage is traveling helps us to experience new things and open our minds to the outside world also get the opportunity to meet different people from different places.
Secondly, experiencing different cultures can be enlightening and educational. One of the way to learn about different culture is to travel. Traveling increases our knowledge and widens our perspective.
To sum up, travelling has tremendous educative, informative and social value.
What was your exact assignment? No one can gauge this unless the exact assignment is known.
I see a few technical errors, but until the content of the piece is nailed down, there's no reason to deal with technical things.
Dear Writeacher,
ESSAY is about
what does traveling make you?
what does traveling teach you?
thanks
You haven't addressed the prompt, which is rather sketchy anyway.
Keep the 1st paragraph. Delete everything else.
Focus the rest of your essay on answering those 2 questions. I see nothing in the directions about advantages and disadvantages!
Dear Writeacher,
I wrote again, thanks for your advise.
Nowadays, traveling is the kind of activity, which almost all the people love. For some people, it is an opportunity to relax and abstract from everyday busy life and also it is interesting to learn about other cultures, therefore traveling has more advantages.
For one thing, traveling helps us to experience new things and open our minds to the outside world, moreover, get the opportunity to meet people from different places. Secondly, experiencing different cultures can be enlightening and educational. One of the ways to learn about a different culture is to travel. For example, when we get a chance to take part in local celebrations we can discover similarities and differences between cultures,
However, there are people who are unhappy when they hear the word "travel", and they will say that traveling is unpleasant and involves a lot of stress due to the necessity to pack their things, use public transport and so on.
To sum up, I think traveling has tremendous educative, informative and social value because traveling increases our knowledge and widens our perspective.
Based on the content of your essay, it seems well-written and expresses your personal views on the subject of traveling. However, as an AI, I am unable to provide a definitive "Ok" or grade your essay. To assess the quality of your writing, there are a few steps you can take:
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