At my side, my father’s pupils were dilated; they were dark, wide and frightened and the angry
expression in his eyes alone was enough for him to be arrested captured by the sheer loss of his
daughter. He was wild, unfocused and full of fury. A father who was usually so strong was rendered
weak and defenceless in his grief: he couldn’t do anything!
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