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It was like taking that first bite into a slice of cheese pizza after a long day of work, and being Blissfully on cloud 9 at the same time! that's how I felt when I got my first free psychic reading and numerology report.

To begin with , I was online reading my horoscope. When suddenly out of no where this ad pops up stating , request your free reading today. To find out who your Protective guardian angel is. I thought why the heck not. then clicked on the ad without even hesitating and requested my free reading.

A few hours later, my first free angel reading was finally ready. I was so ecstatic like a girl is, when she finds out that her crush likes her back. I couldn't wait to see what my guardian angel had to say and who he or she was. I clicked on my email and read my Angel reading. Padre, the
messenger of the angels as he called himself. was the psychic who gave me my free reading.

In the beginning of my reading
Padre stated that my guardian angel’s name was Yeiayel and that she had an urgent message for me. That message was to stop waiting around for a miracle, and to do something. What she said to me in that moment was so true, and that's how I knew padre was the real deal.

Moreover, when padre looked into my future, he said that I have a lot going for me. Then said the reason I've been having a streak of bad luck. Is because of bad luck karma from one of my past lives . The only way to be rid of it forever was for him to complete some sort of ritual. But In order for him to do this, I would have to make a generous donation of 69$. which was unfortunate for me because I did not have that much money at the time.

Furthermore, Padre sent me another email this time saying that he had a dream about me. A dream that was so bonkers he decided to warn me most urgently before the crucial date of November 3, 2015. because on that date, everything would be decided for me as far as my future. He stated that on that particular day, there would be three claps of thunder in the sky. That's how I'll know that everything had been decided for me.

In addition, days and days passed and padre kept sending me emails wanting me to accept his offer. He even lowered the price on his offer. The lowest he went was 49$. when I finally got the money I needed to pay padre something hit me. I thought to myself, “I'm giving away all of my money to this guy, and didn't even bother doing my research.”

I searched up Padre’s angel reading reviews and all of his reviews about him were atrocious. I remember one girl saying that, she got the same reading as someone else. The list of horrible reviews goes on. But there was one review that stood out the most. It stated that Padre wasn't a real person and that his website is run by a company in Hong Kong. I was so furious, that I unsubscribed from Padre’s website and deleted each. and every one of the messages that were ever sent to me.

A week after the whole Padre incident, I was finally up to the task to try something else out, so I decided to learn about my numerology on this amazing numerology website . Let me tell you it was the best decision I ever made! Every single word the guy spoke was so accurate. The first thing I had to do was to put in my name, day, month, and year I was born. Then he explained to me, about the five elements that form the core of my numerology chart which were: my life path, birthday number, soul urge, expression and personality number. After that he then added up my life path number, which came out to be 1 which means as the numerologist stated, that I am born leader and that I have absolute authority in my field. He said that I was ambitious, confident, and fiercely independent.

Afterwards, he then calculated my expression number by analyzing the letters of my full name that I was given at birth which turned out to be 3. It meant that I was fun, spontaneous, and wildly popular. Secondly, then came my soul urge number 5 , Which meant that I loved change, and that I lived to experience as much as possible in the shortest amount of time.
To add on, the numerologist also added a bonus to my numerology chart reading after he was done giving me my numerology numbers. He taught me how to Palm read which was, an amazing thing to learn.

Overall, my first so called psychic experience wasn't all how I hoped it'll be, but It still taught me a lesson. That lesson was to always do my research on a psychic before paying them, and that I'd also had to remember that not all psychics are fakes. Furthermore, I've also learnt about my numerology chart. which has taught me so much more about myself, and I learned how to Palm read.

See my response below. All I can recommend, if you have not learned basic English grammar, is that you turn in your narrative as it stands and see what your teacher thinks of it.