This is an essay dealing with Henry David Thoreau, Mahatma Gandhi, and Martin Luther King Jr. The prompt asked how do these men individually reflect the "sprit of optimism" hence this is the name of the essay (:
I need help to REVISE & EDIT as far as grammar, correct wordings, if there needs to be (s's) or just anything punctuation wise. Check if there is good reasoning. etc. Do I sound College yet or no? If yes then it's a good sign if no then what can I change to make it sound mature (: MUCH APPRECIATED!!!
___________________________________________________
Spirit of Optimism Reflection
INTRODUCTION PARAGRAPH (1):
In the same jail cell, three optimistic men discuss civil liberty and civic responsibility. The individuals begin to consider each other's acts in opposing certain governmental laws for logical reasons. Thoreau in Civil Disobedience, Gandhi in On The Eve of Historic Dandi March, and Martin Luther King Junior in Letter from Birmingham Jail reflects the spirit of optimism by facing reality with logical sense and confidence.
PARAGRAPH (2):
Henry David Thoreau in Civil Disobedience reflects the mind of hope by taking action with confidence in standing up for justice. "If the machine of government is of such a nature that it requires you to be the agent of injustice to another, then, I say, break the law" (Thoreau, par 18). Thoreau suggest individuals resist immoral government action by refusing to cooperate with the government and advocates individuals pay attention to their own moral responsibilities to break unjust laws in a nonviolent manner. “It is truly enough said that a corporation has no conscience; but a corporation of conscientious men is a corporation with a conscience” (Thoreau, par 4). He uses a nonviolent method to convey his message with clarity and force. Reflecting on his choice to disobey the law, Thoreau objects the use of revenue to finance the Mexican War and condemns the enforcement of slavery laws; therefore, he refuses to pay a poll tax causing him an arrest and a night in jail. “I think we should be men first, and subjects afterward. It is not desirable to cultivate a respect for the law, so much as for the right. The only obligation I have a right to assume is to do at any time what I think right” (Thoreau, par 4). His action exemplifies his philosophy of passive resistance, a means of nonviolent protest. While some citizens may agree with the government, others may oppose unjust laws by the government as with Thoreau.
PARAGRAPH (3)
Not only Thoreau breaking the law influence citizens around him, but also, he influences a confident individual from India. Mahatma Gandhi in On the Eve of Historic Dandi March reflects the persona of optimism by expressing his faith and trust in his philosophy of Satyagraha: a philosophy where Mahatma Gandhi designates a determined nonviolent resistance towards any evil. Satyagraha goes beyond daily living; the idea strongly focuses towards political and economic institutions. “I stress only one condition, namely, let our pledge of truth and nonviolence as the only means for the attainment of Swaraj* be faithfully kept” (Gandhi, par 4). His thinking restricts dealing with defeat nor victory, but rather the effect of any potential situation results in harmony. In Gandhi’s speech, he strongly states, “I believe there are men in India to complete the work begun by me. I have faith in the righteousness of our cause and the purity of our weapons” (Gandhi, par 6). Gandhi’s belief shows optimism about logical reasons he tries to lead protests expressing hope and spirit through peaceful marches.
PARAGRAPH (4):
Martin Luther King Junior in Letter from Birmingham Jail mirrors the pneuma of confidence by standing up for justice and opposing injustice towards humankind. King uses his letter to defend his strategy of nonviolent resistance towards racism and oppression in society in response to the Clergymen who censures King’s ideas and actions. He assuringly describes Birmingham as intolerance towards the African American community. The striving man enables the ability to act in which he feels the need to for society. His protests prove to bring justice to his brothers: “caught in an inescapable network of mutuality and tied in a single garment of destiny” (King, par 4). By his assurance, King’s optimism prevails to bring about a message against discrimination.
CONCLUSION PARAGRAPH (5): Discussing civil liberty and civic responsibility, the three unique individuals reflect the minds of optimism from Henry David Thoreau in Civil Disobedience, Gandhi in On The Eve of Historic Dandi March, and Martin Luther King Junior in Letter from Birmingham Jail. Each prophetic leaders, in different times, in dissimilar places immediately and logically respond to injustice with peace reflecting the souls of confidence and hope.
This is quite good. You have not made it a conversation among the three men, but quote well from their written work. Do proofread for syntax and grammar. I point out that in the last paragraph you say, "each prophetic leaders". Each is singular, leaders is plural. They should match.
Can I just use the word "the prophetic leaders" ?
Also Should I include at least 1 dialogue in the 3 body paragraphs in order to include the Conversation or should I include more than 3 dialogue in each?
What would you say?
Yes, that would correct the sentence I pointed out. Just eliminating the "s" from "leader" would do the same. Check the entire essay for any similar mistakes!
Well, if your assignment is to make this a conversation, you have not done that. I think what you have is quite good. From what you post as the assignment, that's not required. I'd just drop the "conversation" and the same jail cell idea and rewrite your introductory paragraph to say something like all three men had the same basic idea involving civil disobedience.
As for going through the whole essay to correct your grammar, etc., we can't do that here. That's up to you to do upon re-reading it and looking for mistakes yourself. I pointed out one as an example.
ok so you are saying to keep the basic idea and say "all three men had the same idea involving civil disobedience" .. the point of the conversation idea was supposed to be the scenario so instead is... "all three men had the same idea involving civil disobedience" a good scenario??
Revised and Edited:
Spirit of Optimism Reflection
INTRODUCTION PARAGRAPH (1):
In the same jail cell, three optimistic men discuss civil liberty and civic responsibility. These individuals consider each other's acts in opposition to certain governmental laws for logical reasons. Thoreau in "Civil Disobedience," Gandhi in "On The Eve of Historic Dandi March," and Martin Luther King Jr. in "Letter from Birmingham Jail" reflect the spirit of optimism by facing reality with logical sense and confidence.
PARAGRAPH (2):
Henry David Thoreau in "Civil Disobedience" reflects the spirit of hope by taking action with confidence in standing up for justice. He states, "If the machine of government is of such a nature that it requires you to be the agent of injustice to another, then, I say, break the law" (Thoreau, par 18). Thoreau suggests that individuals should resist immoral government actions by refusing to cooperate and advocates for individuals to pay attention to their own moral responsibilities in breaking unjust laws in a nonviolent manner. "It is truly enough said that a corporation has no conscience; but a corporation of conscientious men is a corporation with a conscience" (Thoreau, par 4). He uses a nonviolent method to convey his message with clarity and force. Reflecting on his choice to disobey the law, Thoreau objects to the use of revenue to finance the Mexican War and condemns the enforcement of slavery laws; therefore, he refuses to pay a poll tax, leading to his arrest and a night in jail. "I think we should be men first, and subjects afterward. It is not desirable to cultivate a respect for the law, so much as for the right. The only obligation I have a right to assume is to do at any time what I think is right" (Thoreau, par 4). His actions exemplify his philosophy of passive resistance, a means of nonviolent protest. While some citizens may agree with the government, others may oppose unjust laws, as Thoreau did.
PARAGRAPH (3):
Not only does Thoreau's act of breaking the law influence citizens around him, but it also influences a confident individual from India. Mahatma Gandhi in "On the Eve of Historic Dandi March" reflects the spirit of optimism by expressing his faith and trust in his philosophy of Satyagraha: a philosophy where Mahatma Gandhi designates determined nonviolent resistance towards any evil. Satyagraha goes beyond daily living; the idea strongly focuses on political and economic institutions. "I stress only one condition, namely, let our pledge of truth and nonviolence as the only means for the attainment of Swaraj* be faithfully kept" (Gandhi, par 4). Gandhi's thinking restricts dealing with defeat or victory, but rather the effect any potential situation results in harmony. In Gandhi's speech, he strongly states, "I believe there are men in India to complete the work begun by me. I have faith in the righteousness of our cause and the purity of our weapons" (Gandhi, par 6). Gandhi's belief shows optimism about logical reasons he tries to lead protests, expressing hope and spirit through peaceful marches.
PARAGRAPH (4):
Martin Luther King Jr. in "Letter from Birmingham Jail" mirrors the spirit of confidence by standing up for justice and opposing injustice towards humankind. King uses his letter to defend his strategy of nonviolent resistance towards racism and oppression in society, in response to the clergymen who criticize King's ideas and actions. He reassuringly describes Birmingham as intolerant toward the African American community. The striving man enables the ability to act in which he feels the need to in society. His protests prove to bring justice to his brothers: "caught in an inescapable network of mutuality and tied in a single garment of destiny" (King, par 4). Through his assurance, King's optimism prevails to bring about a message against discrimination.
CONCLUSION PARAGRAPH (5):
In discussing civil liberty and civic responsibility, these three unique individuals reflect the spirit of optimism. Henry David Thoreau in "Civil Disobedience," Gandhi in "On The Eve of Historic Dandi March," and Martin Luther King Jr. in "Letter from Birmingham Jail" are prophetic leaders, who in different times and places, immediately and logically respond to injustice with peace, reflecting the souls of confidence and hope.