Sentence (1): Because of inspection devices, ordinary people lose their privacy. Although police say only criminals fear cameras, many people do not trust governments with too much information. Corrupt authorities may use and twist personal information in erroneous ways to victimize individuals. In addition, monitoring devices make mistakes.

Question

Sentence (1): Because of inspection devices, ordinary people lose their privacy. Although police say only criminals fear cameras, many people do not trust governments with too much information. Corrupt authorities may use and twist personal information in erroneous ways to victimize individuals. In addition, monitoring devices make mistakes.

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I am having trouble using the pieces in this sentence to make an appropriate sentence using supercommas??
(Definition of supercomma: descriptive items in a series with internal punctuation)
Here is an example of a sentence totally not related to this topic..

EXAMPLE: My mom asked me to cook dinner: chicken, tossed in breadcrumbs; macaroni, mixed with extra creamy cheese; and toasted garlic bread as a side.

Answer 1

I don't really see how you can reconstruct what you have written using supercommas. What you have here is well written as it is. You might rewrite the last two sentences combining "twist personal information in erroneous ways". "victimize individuals", and "misinterpret video tapes). I'm not sure you can support "monitoring devices make mistakes". The devices record what they record. Humans make mistakes when viewing the record.