hey you!
i have to wirte a letter to a prof of mine .. she is a grammar teacher, so that it would be great when there are no mistakes in the mail.. can somebody look it up?
Dear Ms...
It looks at the moment that I am not able to come to the course at 23. June, because of I need to see a doctor.
I told you that I am diseased with Multiple Sklerose. Now started with a therapy and my doctor needs to see me on that monday, to look wether the medicine works the way it should or not.
I will try to dissarrange the appointment but I'm not sure that it will work because to get a appointment at a neurologist is not that easy. But I hope that if it is not possible to change the date, my place in course will persist.
Cindy
What corrections do you think should be made to this letter?
I'll be glad to check your editing.
I'm not sure about the beginning. Can I really beginn the way I did it?
Here's a better way to start:
It looks like I will not be able to attend the class on 23 June.
wouldn' it be better if I say at the moment it looks like...?
It looks like I willmnot be able to attend the class on 23. June,because I need to see a doctor.
I told you that I am diseased with Multiple Sklerose. Now I finally started with a therapy and my doctor needs to see me on that monday, to look if the medicine works the way it should or not.
I will try to dissarrange the appointment but I'm not sure that it will work because to get a appointment at a neurologist is not that easy. But I hope that if it is not possible to change the date, my place in course will persist.
is it hood that way?
good not hood... sorry for that.
It looks good. I'd change --
I will try to disarrange the . . .
to
I will try to reschedule the . . .
my place in course will persist.
to
I'll still be a member of this class.
multiple sclerosis
Is the correct spelling I think.
Try this:
Dear Ms...
It looks like I will not be able to attend class on 23 June because I need to see a doctor.
I told you that I have multiple sclerosis. I have finally started therapy, and my doctor needs to see me on that Monday to see if the treatment and medicine work the way it should or not.
I will try to reschedule the appointment, but I'm not sure that it will work because getting an appointment with a neurologist is not that easy. But I hope that, if it is not possible to change the date, I'll still be a member of this class.
Cindy
Correction:
... the way they should.