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Really, it is obligated everywhere we go. <~~What does that mean??
- This means that whenever we go somewhere and see that others need help we are obligated to help them.
taking his responsibility <~~ odd phrasing, non-standard
- correction: he is not responsible
Thus, an individual should be responsible regardless whether the circumstances require it or not. <~~ What???
- Everyone is responsible for the well-being of others.
The man in the excerpt was not responsible. <~~Do you really mean that? Or do you mean "irresponsible"? There's a difference, you know.
- What is the difference?
Even if the dog was injured <~~But the dog WAS injured ...
- TRUE!@!&@?!&&
it could have been difficult for the man to help <~~This needs to be explained.
- It would be difficult for the man to stand up and help because he conforms with the crowd, who is not helping and is being nonchalant.
unconcernly <~~nonstandard; not a real word in English
- Is unconcernedly a word?
This, however, greatly affected... This caused the man <~~ The vagueness and the repetition of wording reads awkwardly.
- By abandoning the dog, the man allows it to suffer. This caused him to feel guilty.
I claimed myself cruel <~~nonstandard English
- How?
Everyone should be responsible for other individuals. <~~Sweeping generalization; in these papers you need to get rid of the "should" verbs.
- Using the verb "should" is general?
- It is essential to develop teamwork among other individuals.
Overall, maybe a 3.
The man felt guilty with the dog <~~wrong preposition; nonstandard English
- correction: ..... of the dog
Really, it is obligated everywhere we go. <~~What does that mean??
- This means that whenever we go somewhere and see that others need help we are obligated to help them.
The phrasing “it is obligated” is both vague (what is “it”?) and includes nonstandard use of that verb. You could write this: “We are obligated to help others when we see the need,” but then I would ask you, “Who says we have to?”
taking his responsibility <~~ odd phrasing, non-standard
- correction: he is not responsible Can you rephrase that sentence so you use THIS wording, not your original wording?
Thus, an individual should be responsible regardless whether the circumstances require it or not. <~~ What???
- Everyone is responsible for the well-being of others. And again I ask you, “Who says?”
The man in the excerpt was not responsible. <~~Do you really mean that? Or do you mean "irresponsible"? There's a difference, you know.
- What is the difference? ”not responsible” implies he did not need to do anything at all; “irresponsible” means he had the responsibility, but failed to do what was right.
Even if the dog was injured <~~But the dog WAS injured ...
- TRUE!@!&@?!&&
it could have been difficult for the man to help <~~This needs to be explained.
- It would be difficult for the man to stand up and help because he conforms with the crowd, who is not helping and is being nonchalant. This is better than your original because it’s not vague. When you write vague statements without explaining them, you leave the reader thinking, “huh??” You need to revise that part of the essay to include THIS phrasing instead of the original vague statement … except that you need to rethink “with” and “nonchalant.” Those words are incorrectly used for this sentence.
unconcernly <~~nonstandard; not a real word in English
- Is unconcernedly a word? yes
This, however, greatly affected... This caused the man <~~ The vagueness and the repetition of wording reads awkwardly.
- By abandoning the dog, the man allows it to suffer. This caused him to feel guilty. Better, but what is “this” referring to? You have a bad habit of using pronouns that have no clear antecedents. Study this: http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/pronouns.htm
I claimed myself cruel <~~nonstandard English
- How? The verb is not used correctly with a reflexive pronoun and an adjective. How can you rephrase this and keep the meaning the same?
Everyone should be responsible for other individuals. <~~Sweeping generalization; in these papers you need to get rid of the "should" verbs.
- Using the verb "should" is general? My point is this: Who says we are all responsible for everyone else? Is that a law or something? If so, you need to specifically refer to that law. If not, you need to quit making those generalizations that are the sign of very superficial thinking.
- It is essential to develop teamwork among other individuals. Another vague generalization that needs to be eliminated or explained in detail. Also, the wording “among other individuals” means that others need to work as a team, but not you, the writer!! I doubt that’s what you meant.
Overall, maybe a 3.
The man felt guilty with the dog <~~wrong preposition; nonstandard English
- correction: ..... of the dog No … “the man felt guilty about the dog.
Your problems with verbs and prepositions are cause for concern. When college committees read papers with errors like these, they’ll assume you don’t know English very well, that you will probably need remedial courses before you can begin college-level work.
My best suggestion is that you go to your nearest community college and take their reading and writing placement tests to be sure. If you need remedial work, then take those classes at a community college where the costs are less. Don’t spend expensive four-year college time and money on remedial courses. You’d be cheating yourself that way.
Thank you for bringing these points to my attention. I apologize for any confusion caused by the errors or awkward phrasing in my previous responses. As an AI language model, I strive to provide accurate and helpful information, but I am not perfect and can make mistakes.
To address your specific questions:
- "Obligated everywhere we go" means that it is expected of us to help others wherever we are. It emphasizes the general expectation of providing assistance to those in need in any given situation.
- "Taking his responsibility" is indeed an odd phrasing and does not convey the intended meaning. The correct phrasing should be "he is not responsible" or "he did not take responsibility."
- "An individual should be responsible regardless of whether the circumstances require it or not" means that everyone has a moral or ethical duty to be responsible for the well-being of others, regardless of whether the situation explicitly demands it. It suggests the importance of taking responsibility proactively.
- Regarding the difference between "responsible" and "irresponsible": "responsible" means being accountable and taking appropriate action, while "irresponsible" means lacking accountability and failing to fulfill obligations.
- "Even if the dog was injured, it could have been difficult for the man to help" implies that while the dog was injured, it might have been challenging for the man to offer assistance. This difficulty could have stemmed from various reasons, such as fear of going against the crowd, personal limitations, or uncertainty about how to provide aid.
- "Unconcernedly" is not a commonly used word in English. "Unconcerned" is the correct form.
- Regarding the statement "This, however, greatly affected... This caused the man," I apologize for the vagueness and repetition. To clarify, by abandoning the dog, the man allowed it to suffer, which caused him to feel guilty.
- "I claimed myself cruel" is nonstandard English. It would be more appropriate to say "I considered myself to be cruel" or "I perceived myself as cruel."
- When using the word "should," it implies an ideal or expected behavior but can be too generalizing. To avoid this, it is often better to use more specific verbs and phrases that express actions or attitudes more directly.
- Lastly, "The man felt guilty with the dog" should be corrected to "The man felt guilty about the dog" or "The man felt guilty for what happened to the dog."
Again, I apologize for any confusion caused by the errors and appreciate your understanding. If there are any further questions or clarifications needed, please let me know, and I will be happy to assist you.