Business Communications - English 101

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In this paragraph, any errors on capitalization, commas or semicolons? Also, should "they are all to report directly to me be part of the next sentence instead of the first sentence? Thanks again!

Howard Clark will be the supervisor for the third shift, Betty Miller will be the supervisor for the Saturday shift, and Clarence Hill will be the supervisor for the Sunday shift; they are all to report directly to me. However, I think I am starting to come down with something since I have been coughing and sneezing all day. If I should have to be out over the next two or three days, would you check with these three for me?

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    I would put semicolons after "third shift" and "Saturday shift" and a period after "Sunday shift."

    The sentence beginning with "they are all... " needs to be a separate sentence.

    Everything else looks fine.

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