which is a better metaphor. when tom came out of the shower, he was cleaner then a bar of soap or when sarah was reading her book, she was glued to it.
if one of them is right, try to fix up the sentence because my teacher said that those sentences are improper and then write a better sentence to the original sentence.
The first one is not a metaphor. Do you see why?
Sarah was glued to the fascinating book she was reading.
whats being compared in the second metaphor?
A person to a piece of paper or a piece of wood?
yeah i guess the first one. -_-
Both metaphors can be effective, but they can also be improved for grammatical clarity and enhanced imagery. Here's how you can fix and improve each sentence:
1. Original metaphor: "When Tom came out of the shower, he was clean er than a bar of soap."
- Improvement: "After his shower, Tom emerged sparkling clean, like a freshly unwrapped bar of soap."
2. Original metaphor: "When Sarah was reading her book, she was glued to it."
- Improvement: "As Sarah buried herself in her book, she became transfixed, captivated by the pages as if they held her in an unbreakable embrace."
In these improvements, I adjusted the grammar, added vivid imagery, and provided a smoother flow to the sentences. Remember, metaphors aim to create strong comparisons that engage the reader's imagination.