I need help with my thesis statement for my term paper on Alcatraz. The paper focuses on Alcatraz history, Life on Alcatraz and Famous Prisoners and escapes (10th grade).
I have:
Alcatraz, a federal penitentiary, history of Alcatraz, life on Alcatraz, while Alcatraz was a prison it had a few famous prisoners and escapes.
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Your thesis statement is a good starting point, but it could be more specific and focused. A strong thesis statement clearly outlines the main argument or point you will make in your paper. Here's a revised version of your thesis statement:
"Despite its brief operation as a federal penitentiary, Alcatraz Prison holds a significant place in American history due to its unique role as a maximum-security institution, its notorious reputation for housing dangerous criminals, and the daring escape attempts that captured national attention."
This revised thesis statement highlights the specific aspects of Alcatraz that you will explore in your paper, such as its role as a maximum-security institution, its reputation for housing dangerous criminals, and the notable escape attempts. It gives your readers a clear idea of what to expect from your paper and establishes a strong focus.
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