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ms. sue i writing narrative story on topic that every generation hve something valuble to give. that you learn from everyone.

i thought of writing story on my cousin who pass away from cancer, and i going to write in third person and mention how that cancer totally traumatize his mom and be so depressed. then her other younger son give her hope and courage and she learn to live her life from her son?

that be good idea? im not sure how to start it though, it need to be real descriptive teacher say.

  • English ms. sue -

    i having trouble with one thing, i not know whether to talk in present or past tense, and i don't know where to start story from, should i start when her child is still alive, or when he be dead and she be traumatized?

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    should i make the lady already depressed and that her son has passed away, or that her son has not passed away yet? would it make sense if i made the lady already depressed?

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    I'm not Ms. Sue, but I'll tell you what I think, and you can use the ideas or not.

    I like your story idea: my cousin who pass away from cancer, and i going to write in third person and mention how that cancer totally traumatize his mom and be so depressed. then her other younger son give her hope and courage and she learn to live her life from her son

    Generally, stories are stronger (seem more real) if they are told in present tense. There will have to be some past tenses in there when you refer to the child who died, but overall it should be told in present tense.

    If you start the story from when she is already depressed and then create a flashback to tell about the child's cancer and death, you'll have a good storyline --

    ~ present -- depressed woman after child's death
    ~flashback -- story about the child's cancer and death
    ~return to present -- mom is still depressed, but her younger son becomes a large part of the story to bring her out of her depression ...

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