Social Studies 8R - Paragraph Check

posted by Laruen

Please check my paragraph to see if it's good. If there any detials I should add please let me know. Also please let me know if there any grammar errors.

Obama Win

When Barack Obama was re-elected I was ecstatic. Obama is a really good president and he deserve to be president for the second term. For the past 4 years he done some great achievements. For example, he killed Osama Bin Laden. He didn't EXACTLY killed him but he ordered the United States special forces military unit to kill him. He wants to make sure everyone has access the "American Dream". For the next 4 years I just know he's going to complete his goals.

  1. Ms. Sue

    Looks good.

    Do you see the one small correction you should make in the second sentence?

  2. Laruen

    yes, I'll rephrase that.

    Thank You! :)

  3. Ms. Sue

    You only need to add an "s" to "deserve."

    He DESERVES to be president.

  4. alexis

    please check my my essay okayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy please let me know if there are any wrong let me know

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