Hello I have a job interview question I want to get right.
Below is the note I composed. How does it sound?
Dear Mr. Smith
Thank you for your interest in Apt. 1107, I am glad the apartment met your criteria.
If you have any other questions please feel free to give me a call. I will be happy to assist you.
It was great meeting you and I hope you choose our apatments as your new home.
Also I am posting the guidelines
You’ve recently completed a tour and now it’s time to write the customer a ‘Thank you’ note.
Here’s the customer information:
• Name - Joe Smith
• Tour - Conducted in Apt. 1107 with a 2-bed 2-bath
• Interests - Pool, 24-hour fitness center, second bedroom that can function as an office
• Tour Ended With - Joe was very interested, but wanted to ‘sleep on it’ before making a commitment.
Compose a 'Thank you' note in the provided area. Please take your time completing this answer, as this information will be shared when presenting your information to hiring managers
Thank you
Check for these things:
comma splice - http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/runons.htm#splice
You wrote, "If you have any other questions..." -- what was his first question??
You wrote, "I hope you choose our apatments ... " -- spelling; also is he thinking of renting more than one apartment?
Dear Mr. Smith,
Thank you for considering Apt. 1107 as your potential new home. I am delighted to hear that the apartment met your criteria during our tour. The 2-bed 2-bath layout provides ample space for your needs.
I wanted to let you know that our apartment community offers various amenities that I believe would align with your interests. We have a beautiful pool where you can relax and enjoy the sun, as well as a 24-hour fitness center for your convenience. Additionally, the second bedroom in the apartment can easily be transformed into a functional office space, providing the flexibility you desire.
I understand that you wanted some time to think about your decision before making a commitment. Please feel free to reach out to me with any additional questions or concerns that may arise during your consideration. I am here to assist you and provide any further information you may need.
Thank you once again for considering our apartments as your future home. It was a pleasure meeting you, and I sincerely hope that you choose us as your new residence.
Best regards,
[Your Name]
To compose a thank you note in response to the given scenario, I would recommend the following steps:
1. Begin by expressing gratitude and thanking the customer for their interest in the apartment.
2. Mention that you are pleased to learn that the apartment met their criteria during the tour.
3. Refer to the specific features or interests the customer expressed, such as the pool, fitness center, and the second bedroom functioning as an office.
4. Acknowledge the customer's desire to think about their decision and assure them of your availability to address any further questions or concerns they may have.
5. Conclude the note by reaffirming your appreciation for their consideration and expressing your hope that they choose your apartments as their new home.
6. Sign the note with your name.
Remember to proofread your note for grammar and spelling errors before finalizing it. Good luck with your job interview!