Incorrect sentence: The report considers important factors in choosing a medical facility, ratings of services at the urgent care center, reasons why HMO members do not use the center, and offers suggestions for increase in member usage.
I know this has parallelism problems. I have tried rewriting every way I can think of to correct it with no finished product.
Any help would be much appreciated.
Think about the sentence in list form ~
The report considers
- important factors in choosing a medical facility,
- ratings of services at the urgent care center,
- reasons why HMO members do not use the center, and
- offers suggestions for increase in member usage.
After "considers" each element of the series starts with what kind of word -- noun, verb, adjective, or what?
Let me know and we'll go from there.
important is an adjective; ratings is a noun; reasons is a noun;offers is a verb.
Parallelism is a grammatical principle that ensures consistency in a sentence by using the same grammatical structure for similar elements. In the given sentence, there is a parallelism problem because the list of items is not presented in a parallel manner.
To correct the sentence using parallelism, you need to make sure that each item in the list follows the same grammatical structure. Here's a revised version of the sentence:
The report considers important factors in choosing a medical facility, evaluates the ratings of services at the urgent care center, explores the reasons why HMO members do not use the center, and offers suggestions for increasing member usage.
In this corrected version, each item in the list (considers, evaluates, explores, offers) follows the same verb structure, thus achieving parallelism.