posted by Dawn .
I am not sure if my my original post, posted? lol
o Age, understanding the concept of death, and the changes in family structure all depict the type of grieving a child will experience after to the death of a sibling.
that is my thesis, but I want to know if anybody has suggestions as to how to make it more mature of a thesis.
Age, understanding the concept of death, and the changes in family structure -- all depict the type of grieving a child will experience after the death of a sibling.
But it's not a thesis. It's a statement that is simply factual.
Your thesis statement must include factual information (which you already have) plus your position/opinion/stance. Without your position on the topic, it isn't a true thesis statement. So think of this sentence as the angle you want to take on the topic and what you intend to prove by the end of your paper. (If your statement is simply factual, then there's nothing to prove!)
Read carefully and follow ALL directions.
This is one of the very best places I've seen online to help students write good thesis statements. It shows you sentences that aren't thesis statements and how to turn each one into real thesis statements.