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I'm writing an essay and to me my opening sentence could be worded better or is a run on. Please help.

Although it’s difficult to a chose a particular event or person that had the greatest impact on western civilization, the rule of Constantine the Great was a figure that stood out.

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    I meant choose* not chose by the way.

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    Although there are many events and people that have had great effects on western civilization, Constantine the Great was a figure who stands out.

    1. Making the introductory clause positive rather than negative works better.

    2. "the rule of Constantine" was not a figure.

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    Yeh that's why i said Constantine the Great, but what do you mean by your first statement. How would I change the sentence then?

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    Please reread what I posted. I changed your sentence.

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    Sorry I'm half asleep, thanks.

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