I know I posted this but, I need suggestions on my essay. I'm going to break this into parts so it doesn't look so long make it easier. Please give me any feedback. I just want to know what you think about it. Don't worry about grammar errors for now.
I need this for marks on my essay.
Part 2: This paragraph is a bit long any suggestions on how I should break this down. Any sentences need revising? Please give feedback.
Ernest Hemingway developed his writing through working as a reporter and journalist in newspapers and magazines. He contributed in writing stories for the school newspaper, The Trapeze, and its literary magazine, Tabula. He contributed three stories during his junior year and during that time it revealed his early interest in violent death and suicide. Hemingway had written 24 articles for The Trapeze between November 1916 and May 1917. The quality of his work was not exceptional. Although the work he submitted wasn't all that great, but he gained experience that would help prepare him for his first job after graduating from high school. He took up the job as a cub reporter after high school with the Kansas City Star, one of the leading newspapers in America during that time period. He was given advice from first-rate journalistic professionals. Hemingway has to make his writing meet specific standard requirements with the Kansas City Star style sheet. The reporters have to avoid adjectives, use short sentences, brief paragraphs, vigorous English, and fresh phrases. This style of writing became the permanent influence in Hemingway's own style as a fiction writer. Hemingway covered the police station and the city hospital, and interviewed victims of accidents and violent crimes. By the end of April 1918, Hemingway left the Kansas City Star to join an American Red Cross ambulance unit in World War I. After his return from the war he worked very hard as a writer. He tried to follow a formula to sell his stories to any mass-market magazines such as The Saturday Evening Post. In the end the stories he submitted was in vain. His work was rejected because he couldn't find his own narrative voice or his own material. In January 1920, Hemingway left for Toronto and became a freelancer for the Toronto Star. After his marriage with Hadley Richardson he worked at Paris as a correspondent for the Toronto Star. He returned to Chicago in May and worked for the Co-operative Commonwealth, a monthly magazine. In November 1922, he was in Lausanne, Switzerland covering a peace conference on a territorial dispute between Greece and Turkey. Hemingway left Paris and returned to Toronto where he became a full-time reporter with the Toronto Star. After Christmas, Hemingway resigned his position as a reporter at Toronto Star. In February 1924, he returned to France where he worked as an unpaid assistant editor for transatlantic review, a journal founded by Ford Madox Ford that publish experimental fiction. Ford decided to go to New York to raise more money for the review. Ford wrote an announcement in the July issue that he is leaving the editorial duties to Hemingway while he is in New York. Upon Ford's return from New York he saw the contributor list for August issue. Ford thought that Hemingway had used the opportunity to publish his American friends' work while he was gone. Hemingway felt that his criticism was unfair because he had worked so hard for the review. In January 1925, the transatlantic review came to an end. His days as a journalist helped him gain the experience he needed to become a fiction writer. Journalism was only part of what made him a successful writer. He also had many leading writers at that period as his literary influences.
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Again ... without seeing your outline and draft thesis, it's very hard to tell. Or did you skip that part of the process?
Skipping the organization part of the writing process -- drafting a thesis and planning and writing an outline -- leads to disorganized writing such as what you posted above.
Please post your outline.
Overall, your paragraph provides a good overview of Ernest Hemingway's background in journalism and its impact on his writing career. However, it can be broken down into smaller paragraphs to improve readability. Here's a suggested revision:
Ernest Hemingway's development as a writer was greatly influenced by his early experiences in journalism. While still in school, he contributed stories to the school newspaper, The Trapeze, and its literary magazine, Tabula. His junior year writings showcased his early fascination with violent death and suicide.
After graduating from high school, Hemingway took on a job as a cub reporter at the Kansas City Star, one of the leading newspapers at the time. Working alongside seasoned journalists, he learned the importance of adhering to the newspaper's style guidelines, including avoiding adjectives, implementing short sentences and paragraphs, and using vigorous English and fresh phrases. This particular style of writing would later have a lasting impact on Hemingway's own fiction writing.
During his time at the Kansas City Star, Hemingway covered various beats, such as the police station and city hospital, where he conducted interviews with victims of accidents and violent crimes. However, in April 1918, he left the newspaper to join the American Red Cross ambulance unit during World War I.
Upon his return from the war, Hemingway dedicated himself to writing, attempting to sell his stories to mass-market magazines like The Saturday Evening Post. Unfortunately, he faced rejection due to his struggle to find his own narrative voice and unique material.
In 1920, Hemingway became a freelancer for the Toronto Star, eventually relocating to Paris after marrying Hadley Richardson. He continued working as a correspondent for the Toronto Star, covering various European events, including a peace conference in Lausanne, Switzerland.
After a brief stint in Chicago working for the Co-operative Commonwealth magazine, Hemingway returned to Toronto. However, in 1924, he decided to go back to France and became an unpaid assistant editor for the transatlantic review, a journal that published experimental fiction. Hemingway assumed full editorial duties while the founder, Ford Madox Ford, went to New York to raise funds for the review. This led to tension between Hemingway and Ford, who accused him of favoring American friends in the publication.
In 1925, the transatlantic review came to an end, but Hemingway had already gained valuable experience as a journalist, which would greatly contribute to his success as a fiction writer. It's important to note that Hemingway was also influenced by several leading writers of his time.
By breaking down the paragraph into smaller sections, each focusing on a specific aspect of Hemingway's journalism career, the information is presented more clearly and concisely. Remember to review and revise the paragraph for grammar errors and other improvements after receiving feedback. Good luck with your essay!