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"Yes I did" the turtle said.
They went on arguing, and arguing the rabbit lost his mind; He got a stick, and start beating the turtles back shell. Break the shell all up. That is why the turtle has spots all over him.
The Turtle was all beat up, broken back, and laying down calling for help, "Help! Help! I need help!" shouted the turtle.
An ant heard him and said, "Somebody needs help. Somebody needs help!"
"Where?!" one of the ants said.
"Back in there somewhere," he replied.
"Let's go help him," they said. They all got together and lined up, and they all went over to where they heard someone shouting for help.
They came and asked the turtle what he wanted.
"I need help. I got beat up. My back is broken. I need somebody to help me. He told the ants to eat his fat he got in there."
So the ants ate the fat the blood in there, started sewing him up. After that, he got well. That's why the turtle has spots all over him. That's the end of my story.

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    "Yes I did" the turtle said.
    They went on arguing, and arguing. (period) The (new sentence and capital T) rabbit lost his mind; He got a stick, and start(ed) (past tense) beating the turtle's (possessive = 's) back shell. He broke (need subject and past tense)( the shell all up. That is why the turtle has spots all over him.
    The Turtle was all beaten (past participle) up, had a (add more words) broken back, and was lying(lying vs. laying) down calling for help, "Help! Help! I need help!" shouted the turtle.
    An ant heard him and said, "Somebody needs help. Somebody needs help!"
    "Where?!" one of the ants said.
    "Back in there somewhere," he replied.
    "Let's go help him," they said. They all got together and lined up, and they all went over to where they heard someone shouting for help.
    They came and asked the turtle what he wanted.
    "I need help. I got beaten (past participle) up. My back is broken. I need somebody to help me. He told the ants to eat his fat he got in there."
    So the ants ate the fat, (comma =
    GRoss!) the blood in there, started sewing him up. After that, he got well. That's why the turtle has spots all over him. That's the end of my story.

    Note that I corrected what I saw.

    Sra

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