English- Due @ 8
posted by angela .
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Obesity is one of the major causes of health problems in the United States. According to Charles Schmidt, obesity is starting to catch up with smoking, which is causing illness and death (706). Research has been done about this topic for many years. It is more common in the United States because of all the different fast food restaurants. Among the states in the United States, 22 of those states were found to be obese in 2006. Mississippi and West Virginia were the leading for obesity (Green 33). Often, people do not take this health issue as seriously as they should. Obesity can occur in the early stage of one’s life and get worse over time. Some people think that it is caused by just eating junk food, but it can also be lack of exercise, and many other factors as well. As adults, we should watch what our children eat and make sure that they partake in some type of exercise each day. Sitting in front of the television playing video games or just walking through the house is not considered exercising. Obesity can be caused by overeating, genes, and stress.
First, overeating is the major problem in obesity. People do not watch the different calories and protein that they intake on a daily basis. Each day the body requires a certain amount of food, according to the Food Pyramid developed by the US Department of Agriculture (USDA). A lot of times, we eat things just because it is in our presence. One has to take control of his or her mind and tell it when enough is enough. Sometimes, it just seems like we cannot get full, but as older people sometimes say, “Your eyes are bigger than your belly.”
Also, obesity is not always caused by overeating, but it can be a hereditary issue. Most of the time if both parents are obese then the child or children will be obese as well. A reason is that the parents have not formed an eating and lifestyle habit. Some families struggle day to day trying to find ways to prevent this problem among their children and themselves. “Just because your whole family is overweight does not mean that is your destiny. We all can change the expression of our genes by involving our physical environment as well as our cellular environment via diet and lifestyle choices’’ (Jillian Michaels 26).
Next, we tend to let stress overtake us. Many people do not know exactly how to handle stress. Often, people that stress, lose sleep, exercise less, and drink a lot of alcohol, all which can promote obesity (“Stress and Overeating” 6). Of course there is good stress and bad stress. Bad stress is not good for the body because overtime you will find yourself gaining excess weight when you could have prevented it. Some people tend to eat when they get frustrated or things seem to overwhelm them. However, this is not a good idea because you are not doing anything but causing different health problems to occur in your body. Some of the problems could be high blood pressure, shortness of breath, diabetes, and arthritis.
Obesity is continuing to grow day by day. However, we need to discipline ourselves so that we can lower the percentage of obesity among children and adults. This has to be a goal that one must be willing to do. The key thing is to start by forming a group that will motivate him or her to lose weight. (Raj and Kumar 602). There are many other things we can do to help make us healthier and less worried about whether we will be able to see tomorrow or not. Overeating, genes, and stress have caused obesity for so many years, but we can take a stand and change it now.
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"of those states were found to be obese in 2006." = actually the states are not obese; it's the people in the states
"it can be a hereditary issue." = is that "a" or "an?"
"overtime" not one word, but "over time"
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Ok Sra were those the only errors that you founded?
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Yes, as far as I know.