Hi;
Just wondering if my grammar looks good.:)
Some people find fables to be a negative thing because they are clearer then what they would actually be in reality.
Like they teach children that the good always win or gain the good thing.
I disagree with this view point because morals give us consequences of things.
yeah maybe good don't always win in life but being responsible, and a good person can really effect the environment, and the people around us.
Like if I keep lying to people they will take a negative view on me and will basically never believe what I say. If I don’t plan my work correctly it can damage my work and wont give me the grade I want. That is what fables teach us.
I think fables teach us values more than actually having a negative impact on us.
I think fables always give positive impacts on children. I really think teaching them to children is a positive thing. Fables don’t waste the child’s' time to just distract them in something. No, they can give the child these lessons that will frame in his/her personality, and will be carried on in life.
The child will take these lessons and will pass them on to their children as they grow to make this world a more positive, and peaceful world. Fables teach us many values we need to make this a better world . Like they teach us honesty, caring, responsibility, not to judge people on how they look.
We need these lessons to form a more peaceful environment. That is why I think fables are a positive thing to teach to children.
"clearer then what" = than, not then
"yeah maybe good don't always win" I would not use slang with "yeah" in an essay, and the first word of a sentence is capitalized. Plus don't is bad grammar = good doesn't
Check the dictionary for the difference between "effect" and "affect"
"negative view on me" = view OF me
"that will frame in his/her" drop "in" = frame his/her
Sra
thank you sooooooooooo much :)) thanx for all the help
Overall, your grammar looks good. However, I would recommend a few minor corrections to improve clarity and readability. Here are the suggested revisions:
1. "Some people find fables to be negative because they are clearer than what they would actually be in reality."
- Revised: Some people find fables to be negative because they present a clearer picture than what is often experienced in reality.
2. "Like they teach children that the good always win or gain the good thing."
- Revised: This is because fables teach children that the good always wins or gains positive outcomes.
3. "I disagree with this viewpoint because morals give us consequences of things."
- Revised: I disagree with this viewpoint because morals help us understand the consequences of our actions.
4. "Yeah, maybe good don't always win in life, but being responsible and a good person can really affect the environment and the people around us."
- Revised: While it is true that goodness doesn't always prevail in life, being responsible and kind can have a positive impact on both the environment and the people around us.
5. "Like, if I keep lying to people, they will take a negative view of me and will basically never believe what I say."
- Revised: For example, if I continue to lie to people, they will develop a negative perception of me, leading them to doubt the veracity of my words.
6. "If I don’t plan my work correctly, it can damage my work and won't give me the grade I want."
- Revised: Similarly, if I fail to plan my work properly, it can adversely affect the quality and prevent me from achieving the desired grade.
7. "That is what fables teach us."
- Revised: This is one of the important lessons that fables impart.
8. "I think fables teach us values more than actually having a negative impact on us."
- Revised: I believe that fables primarily teach us important values rather than having a negative impact on us.
9. "I think fables always give positive impacts on children."
- Revised: I believe that fables always have a positive impact on children.
10. "Fables don't waste the child's time just by distracting them."
- Revised: Fables are not mere distractions that waste a child's time.
11. "No, they can give the child these lessons that will be ingrained in their personality and carried throughout their lives."
- Revised: On the contrary, fables provide children with valuable lessons that become ingrained in their personalities and shape their behavior throughout their lives.
12. "The child will take these lessons and pass them on to their children as they grow, making the world a more positive and peaceful place."
- Revised: Children who learn these lessons from fables will carry them forward, passing them on to future generations, thus contributing to a more positive and peaceful world.
13. "Like they teach us honesty, caring, responsibility, not to judge people based on appearance."
- Revised: For instance, fables teach us principles such as honesty, compassion, and responsibility, as well as the importance of not judging others based on their appearance.
You have expressed your thoughts clearly, and these revisions will make your writing even more effective. Good job!